Acoustic song for comments?

[vintagetobes]

hey, heres a song i recorded about a year ago and i was just wondering if anyone could make any comments about the song itself + a bit about the recording? . good/bad/why etc...
as i said it was done a while ago so i could prob do a better job of it now.
also could you suggest a catagory/style of music which this fits into. i just cant work it out considering it is quite a 'normal' song

cheers

 

[tremblayj]

I can't say much about the quality of the recording because I am not yet that good but the song is great. I do think that the bi in the beginning is great but a little low. I actually turned up the sound to hear it and then the strum came and wow!
anyways this is just my opinion and I love the style, reminds me of an almost rockyer damien rice.

 

[XLR]

I like the song a lot!

I think the level of the intro is too low, and the EQ during the intro emphasizes too much fingering noise.

I like the arrangement with just two acoustic guitars (sounds like the same instrument doing two tracks) and the vocal. Very expressive that way.

The vocal is engaging. But intonation is just a little off in spots, and you might want to auto-tune it or even better, retrack the vocal. I think the song is good enough to make it worthwhile. Makes me think of tracks I've heard of Beatles alternate takes where the singing was a little out of tune but almost there, as they were working up to the finished version.

Great writing.

Tim

 

[jake-owa]

Ok, the guitars are too midlow heavy in the same spot. If it were mine I would cut a big lump out of the lows in each side. Maybe a big wide cut at 300 on one and 400 on the other just to get them a bit cleaner in that are. Where the one guitar starts little solo thingies it isn't adding anything to the song and having them both wide panned there's no balance to those parts. I would send a wet only reverb mix off the guitar to the opposite side and pan both a bit less severely. The vocal wants more space around it..I would compress it and boost it a bit.

I like the song but I think some of the extraneous riffing could be ironed out or deleted to make the song flow better. The vocal is interesting to my ears and needs to be a bit more (I'm gonna make up a phrase here) ear-visible through the guitars. I would trail off the last note quickly and not drag it out but that's an artistic call. There are a few pitchy spots but they actually add to a character vibe here so I wouldn't worry too much about that.