A New TripleM song

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Sounds cool,I like the upbeat feel.
I thought the writing was pretty good.

Rythym guitar was especially nice.
How did you record it?

Nice job,
Pete
 
Hey Triple M........
Nice vocals man, lead and bg's. I thought the writing was cool too. Cool pop. Re: the recording, things sound really compressed........ but that would be my only gripe. Nice work though, the tones you selected for the song really fit the genre well.

Very nice work man,

G
 
"whats yours is mine--and what's mine, we can share" that line cracked me up!

Anyway, I think you got a good mix on all the instruments. All the parts are clear and separate. I like what you are doing with your vocals better now too. They sound more close miced, which I think is a good thing. A lot of hiss at the end--what are you recording on?

I think the song is better than you think it is too!
 
listening right now..
....man my winamp is screwed up this is full of static...not just this song but all of em i played today..

other than that...cool vibe...you have a cool voice.....i think the writing is good its not "stuff i saw on t.v."..but i really dug that song...so .....i think the mix is great..."whats mine is your....."...great lyric.there...you always have great harmonies and this is no different....great job....this has a r.e.m. feel to it...i think i said this before?...do you listen to them much??......maybe its just me...


thanks
jamal:D
 
did you post this song before? the line about "which third world country did they make it in" sounds vaguely familiar. still caught my ear anyway :) very funny stuff. your writing is very original and very clever. guitars are sounding better as is the vocal.

i agree with the rem influence musically, i remember another tune of yours calling them out and alluding to them in the bass line, very clever indeed.

honestly, there is still something about your mixes (not the songs, just the mix) that sounds a little harsh to me. i don't know enough about mixing yet to know what it is but it's there anyway. some sort of heavy upper midrange quality that just sort of jumps out at me.
 
muze/Pete - glad you liked the writing. I like the music myself. The words aren't solid top to bottom - hence my comment. There are two rhythm parts, but I think I know which one you're referring to. I used an SM57 about 3 inches from the grill and angled about 30 degrees. It's double tracked, with one track going 65% to one side, and the other going 30% to the other (I did that because the other rhythm part was on that side and I didn't want to cover it up).

Guernica - thank you much. I've been working extremely hard on getting the guitar tones I want. I'm not where I want to be yet, but I'm getting there. I was a little scared on the vocals. I thought they were better than I've done before, but I wasn't sure they were really that good. On the compression thing... I just purchased Ozone which has, among other things, a multiband compressor. This was my first experience with such an animal. It is very cool - I was able to bring out a very nice bass sound with it. I was trying to use it to tame a bunch of sounds I didn't want as well. But now you've let me know that I went a bit too far. Valuable information - thank you. Ozone also has a 'Stereo Imaging' module. I'm concerned I went overboard on this and didn't monitor thru headphones. Did anyone listen through headphones, and if so, did it sound "hollow" in the middle or otherwise weird? Just wondering.

crawdad - you always give me good feedback. The lead vocals and the low harmonies are close miced. For the high harmonies I was about 8 in. away and angled about 35%. I also turned the mid's down on the mixer just a nudge. This kept them from sounding harsh and/or ringing through everything else. Glad you noticed an improvement. It's funny - I originally considered the line you referred to as a throwaway. But after a while, I thought it was ok. A pat on the back to anyone who gets what the "bluer objects are closer than they seem" line. The hiss is coming from one or more of the amplifiers. Getting the sound I wanted produced the hiss. I cut out the hiss in other spots, but I had to leave the last chord at the end exposed.

jamal - cool response. Glad you like the vocals and ESPECIALLY the harmonies. I love working on those. Some days I like what I do and some days I think it's crap. Lyrically it's definitely not what TV is. But musically it's ok. I listen to REM, have a couple of their CDs, and generally like them. I've never tried to emulate them, and I think Mike Stipe is an arrogant bitch ("Mike has the very best rock star tripe"). I don't know why you get an REM feel with my stuff, but I'll take the compliment. I'll listen with that in mind some time too.

Everyone - unfortunately they've begun blocking MP3's at work. This was my only good opportunity to monitor mixes (you've noticed I haven't done much this week). I'm going to try to get cable modem service hooked up at home (my current dialup is pretty bad). But even then, I have so little time at home. In the meantime - I'm not ignoring anybody. I wish I could do more.

Geez this is as long as a B.SABBATH note :D.
 
Bluer objects...you're not talking blue pill/red pill, are you?
This is cool pop. I especially like the melody line and harmonies toward the end of each chorus, pretty intricate. Like others, I think the writing is good, too.
I like all the instrumentation except the fuzz guitar, but that might be exactly as you wanted it. It was almost a little too much 60's.

Marktrix
 
eric - I posted this song a long time ago. I didn't think anyone would remember it. It was my first attempt. I played with a click track, but not correctly, and tried to retrofit a drum track over it. It sucked real bad. I got 5 or 6 reviews saying the drums sucked. But nobody got past that. So I figured I might get more in depth reviews if I re-did it from scratch. Thanks for the writing compliments. I agree with you on my mixes being too harsh, but I think I'm getting better with each attempt.

mkg - thank you mark. bluer objects are not a drug reference. Try again :). I liked your compliments on the melody/harmonies, makes me feel good. You know... I tracked that little guitar riff with about 10 different tones and I didn't like any of them. This is the one I disliked least. After a while it grew on me.

Thanks to you both.

eric - maybe not this song, but will you do drums for me sometime? PM me if you're up for it.
 
hey!

this is a lot more polished than the one with the snappy snare!

are you selling out on us???

going top 40????

it is very popish and the guitar riff is reminiscent of the james gang's "midnight man" which is a great song.

i think youre really moving up fast songwise and soundwise!

humf!!!!!

p.s. the snare needs just a little more "snap"!

:)
 
Really good pop tune. Clever chord structure and vocal arrangement. On the technical side, I could wish for a different snare sound and ring it up a bit. And right on the very end I hear the guitar idleing hiss. Cut that crap outa there man:D
I like this tune.
 
I can see the barenaked ladies doing this tune. It had a very live feel to it. I liked the song a lot. I didn't care for the mix, but that was more personal preference than anything. There really wasn't anything wrong with the mix though. Did you put a chorus on the vocals?
 
Man...I sincerely wish I could sing like you. I'll BET you love working on background vocals...because you don't have to put your privates in a vice-clamp to get them to sound great. Natural tenor. Very nice. (@3:09, I'm hearing some pitch problems in the bg vox...no biggie).

From a songwriting standpoint, you have some very clever lines that I haven't heard (i.e., 'I don't have time to mess with you, we might as well be late"), and the less than original lines ("Objects in mirror may be...") are used in a unique way. I'm having some trouble tieing it all together in a central "Time Machine" theme, but I'm pretty thick-headed, so take that with a grain of salt. I pretty much have to be smacked over the head and led by the nose before I "get it."

REM had a couple of tunes that this could sort of sound like, but I'm definitely getting more of a BareNaked Ladies vibe...(Okay, don't punch me for this, but that first verse...reminded me of...I really shouldn't say this, because it's MUCH cooler...but it reminded me of...


















(reconsidering)




















deciding it doesn't matter anyway...



















THE MONKEES.

Please limit your innevitable ire and hatemail to the "PM" arena.
Really nice Job, Trip...sorry I don't have any mix comments.
 
very good!-excellent vocals-good melody. I like the progression during the verse-very clever...Well constructed tune all around-Mix sounds pretty good-vocal layering sounds great-guitar tones are decent-drums..you need a great drummer! I guess you know that...It's always a pleasure listening to your tunes 3M.
 
jeapster - thanks for the listen. Selling out? You cut me to the core :D. It has more polish because I've been working hard trying to apply the advice I've received here. I think next time I'll put out two versions: the regular one and the "alternate jeap mix" which will have a snappy snare. Thank you for the compliments though. It was good to hear I'm improving.

Rat - good to hear compliments from a pro (or at least someone who is really knowledgable). Yeah - I didn't know what to do about the hiss.

JR#97 - glad you at least liked the song. I'm out to impress you with the mix next time :D. No chorus on the vocals, but fairly heavy reverb (heavy for me anyway). Thanks for your time.

chrisharris - or is it jamal LMAO. The tie into Time Machine is pretty lame and the main reason I say the writing is so-so. The song has to do with not having the time to do the things you want to do in life (such as write and record music). So if one had a time machine, one could get his work done, then go back and get some music done. Pretty stupid huh? But then I threw in the Einstein thing and the bluer objects stuff, which was somewhat cool. I don't mind the Monkees comparison at all. They had some great songs (written by some first class songwriters). Gotta check out the 3:09 thing.

Stratomaster - very nice words. I appreciate it. The lead vox had 4 tracks, both the low and high harmonies had 2 tracks (bringing tears of pride to VOXVENDOR's eyes I know). Fairly heavy reverb on all of them. I know about the drummer thing (it's my computer right now)... erichenryus - are you listening to this? :D:D:D

To anyone else still paying attention to this thread and this post... Is this close to radio ready? Or do I need to go back to work and do better? How close am I? Curious.
 
As much as I like the tune, on the technical side, it's just not there. Taking it to a very fine point, the drums are just too weak. For radio, they sound way too much like a drum machine. Just my humble opinion my friend.
 
For me this had that happy '60s pop feel, a few people from my office walked in while I was listening and immediately started dancing around, like the Peanuts gang when Schroeder's playing the piano :p
Great feel and a good mix. I would have liked the snare and kickto pop out a little better, they seemed slightly distant. And Not to sound too nitpicky, but some of the higher vocals (in the chorus I guess) seemed just the littlest bit off. Great job though, you've definitely got a good song there :D
 
Thanks Barometer... Dancing around like the Peanuts gang huh? Wish I could have seen it. Gotta pay attention to those harmonies - chrisharris mentioned something too.
 
very retro sounding to me....a cross between the Turtles and the Monkees(like someone else mentioned) to me....with a little 'sappy' Dave Clark 5 thrown in too. The fidelity is lacking with things not having any punch, dynamics, low end, and just general "fullness". The effect on the vocals is ok, I suppose but the guitar fuzz is fair to poor sounding. The music is the winner between recording and writing. The singing is the best of it all. A very radio worthy pop song, but the recording would have to come up a couple notches to gain you that airplay.
 
Originally posted by TripleM
The song has to do with not having the time to do the things you want to do in life (such as write and record music). So if one had a time machine, one could get his work done, then go back and get some music done. Pretty stupid huh?

not at all...very cool, actually.

I don't mind the Monkees comparison at all. They had some great songs (written by some first class songwriters)
I love an open-minded tunesmith. Trip, the following has nothing to do with your tune, per se, but I had to throw in the fact that my Mom was the biggest NEIL DIAMOND fan ever...(wrote "Daydream Believer," I think)... and I just think it's cool that you seem to have a really broad musical base to draw inspiration from. I just DIG ORIGINAL TUNES...and the whole writing process. My comments mean nothing, but "keep writing."

Thanks,
Chris
 
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