a new recording...without the production.....

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hi

just a little demo of a song im working on

i know most of you liked the other song i posted.... but some people said i just did FAR too much production wise.... well this one is really stripped back

i know its not perfect right now (backing vox a little too loud) but what about the general feel and sparsness?

http://soundcloud.com/stickboy/stickboy-tremblin-stone-demo


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That was really nice. What I liked...and listened for...was the way you organized the fills in the piano and guitar after the two-minute mark...final chorus. It was effective...going from a bit more meandering improv dialogue between the two parts, to some more structured...almost unison...lines. It was an uptick in dynamics, and and a strong close.

And no superfluous bloops and beeps and clash and bang!!!!

If you were to do a bit more to it, some light hand-percussion and high freq time keeping with , say, a fucci, would be a good compliment. Acoustic bass at some later point....whining and glissing... would also build momentum and interest. [the midrange is full-up....room for complimentary noise at the bottom and top]

I like it so much more that the previous stuff. This is your solid core.
 
ahh cheers man - i have a few tracks like this.... no click, no writing guitar parts, key parts just freestyling and whilst i do love doing this kinda thing, i still love making the over the top stuff ha, silly i know but it seems to do better for me for some reason.

when i come to record it properly i wont get too carried away with it, the track doesnt need it but will DEFINATELY take on some of your ideas...in the most i was thinking along the same lines

Cheers man

Hope all is well

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Very interesting tune.... At first, the vocals seemed extraordinarily hot. Covers up almost everything else. I'd probably lower them just a bit, if it were me doing the mix.

Sounds very unplugged and raw - in a good way. As Jeff mentioned, I really think some minimal shakers and maybe some bongos during the chorus would enhance the recording.

I love your stuff, man. Your vocals are spot on, and your music is laden with emotion and depth. Very nice to listen to.
 
Really like it, vox are hot, but you said that already... Love the acoustic tone, chords, and riffs. Great writing, great vocal tone, great song. Would buy it. Dig it. Love that depressing sound, gives a great mental image. That's what it's about man.

As you continue to work on this, personally, I felt like the piano and GTR were kind of fighting each other (musically) from 0:08 - 0:12, maybe dial back the Acoustic riff there?

1:28- 1:29 timing on the gtr riff seems odd. Bamp.. ba damp...ba dam... just stuck out to me, maybe bamp... ... ba dam. (I know that's highly technical terminology.:cool:) I don't know, fade the middle lick on playback... see what you think.

1:49 sounded like the chair popped or something... I always miss that crap in my recordings, just pointing it out.

2:14 GTR timing... strummed chord sounds just a few frames out of time.

There are some clicks at the end, sounds like the old spacebar... I'm sure you were aware of that, but again... just stuff I sometimes miss in mine because I'm focused on a certain instrument or something.

Really great recording.

JM
 
I thought it sounded great man. Like the others said the vocals in general were a little too loud, but in contrast to the lead, I didn't feel that the backing vocals was to loud, I thought the counterpoint was cool and it sat nicely with the lead. Are you playing a real keyboard thru an amp (sounds kinda like a rhodes) or is it a VST modeler type thing? Either way maybe try reamping it to give it a little bit of a creepy empty room feel, might compliment the vibrations of the song. If you have a tile bathroom try that.
Overall I thought the song was awesome, nice job.

-Barrett
 
hey folks

this is just a really rough demo to be honest..... things may be out of time or not quite perfect.... i played the acoustic guitar whilst singing the vox and then just improvised the guitar lead over it afterwards....no click or anything

the keys are my roland stage piano (in rhodes mode) so i could certainly dirty up a little in pro tools or amp sim or something)

I just wanted to post it to see what people thought of me doing this kind of recording compared to the full blown production of my previous post

when i get round to finishing this it will be a re record from scratch.... problem is i usually find that it sounds better and neater with a re record but misses that bit of magic that you just cant get with the first take..mistakes and all

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Hmmm...you certainly have some interesting lyrics once again and the vocals have that up front intimate sound to them which is well done.

I too think the vocals are louder in comparison to the backing tracks than they need to be even for this kind of arrangement.

Personally, I much prefer the full blown deal on the previous track. Which again, I thought was really very well done. This is a little too sparse with too little sonic variation to retain interest. Seems to be working for folks though, so have at it :)!
 
Hi stickboy,
yeah that sounds good. Too sleepy to my taste but who cares?
There's something odd about the 'solo' in the intro. 0:09-0:10 are a clear example. It's like the guitar tune is off or the playing ruins a couple of notes. Just briefly though, and you said you would re-record. Voice sits very well I must say, despite other comments, nice and cosy. Some of the plosives need discipline though. Rhodes is tasty. Could be playing something more interesting, it's very basic. But then again, the whole song's quite basic. I had this feeling that this reminded me of something, and it just hit me: Under the Milky Way! And oddly enough even the lyrics are similar: "wish I knew what you were looking for" vs. "hope you get to where you want to be".
 
I like the song and its simplicty. It works very well and you're singing is wonderful. The only think I might add on top of the vocals being too loud is they are also in a different space. Seemingly too dry compared to the roomier sound of the acoustic.

cool man!!
 
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