a 23-year- old song

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Trailing Behind Again
Inspired by gibsonguy09, I decided that I would post the lyrics to one of the first songs I ever wrote. It's been lying around and I've never put music to it (I have a melody in my head, but I've never figured out how to put it to music). Anyway, this is where my head was at 23 years ago:

RENEGADE​

Standing in the shadows, you're on the make
Not looking for trouble or a chance to take
Oh, they say it's hard to live the way you do
Always the rebel, it's always different for you

So you're wrong
When it all comes down, you're the renegade
You don't belong
You're against the grain, you're the renegade

Branded an outlaw, you committed no crime
You didn't break their laws, you won't serve their time
But you're running away, and even though it's not right
You won't stand your ground and they can't make you fight

So you're wrong
When it all comes down, you're the renegade
You don't belong
You're against the grain, you're the renegade
There will always be a price to pay​



I don't know why I held on to this for so long. The only change I ever made to it was the last line the second time you sing the chorus, as it leads to a guitar solo. This change was done about a year after it was written. So what do you think? This came from the mind of a 15-year-old in the early 80's....
 
Rokket said:
Inspired by gibsonguy09, I decided that I would post the lyrics to one of the first songs I ever wrote. It's been lying around and I've never put music to it (I have a melody in my head, but I've never figured out how to put it to music). Anyway, this is where my head was at 23 years ago:

RENEGADE​

Standing in the shadows, you're on the make
Not looking for trouble or a chance to take
Oh, they say it's hard to live the way you do
Always the rebel, it's always different for you

So you're wrong
When it all comes down, you're the renegade
You don't belong
You're against the grain, you're the renegade

Branded an outlaw, you committed no crime
You didn't break their laws, you won't serve their time
But you're running away, and even though it's not right
You won't stand your ground and they can't make you fight

So you're wrong
When it all comes down, you're the renegade
You don't belong
You're against the grain, you're the renegade
There will always be a price to pay​



I don't know why I held on to this for so long. The only change I ever made to it was the last line the second time you sing the chorus, as it leads to a guitar solo. This change was done about a year after it was written. So what do you think? This came from the mind of a 15-year-old in the early 80's....
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I LOVE IT ROKKET.......It is sooooooo much better than my geetar playin'.. :D
You really should put it to music.....it has a 50's rebel rock feel to it...but you weren't even born yet were you?... :o
 
true-eurt said:
I LOVE IT ROKKET.......It is sooooooo much better than my geetar playin'.. :D
You really should put it to music.....it has a 50's rebel rock feel to it...but you weren't even born yet were you?... :o
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1966... damn I feel old... Thanks anyway! I will get around to recording it one day, but I kind of hear an 80's metal thing when I work on it...
 
hey ..... I am working on another verse on my song. Thanks i think you habe improved i think adn i hope i will to :confused: By the way the song is kewl. I think i put a tune to it and it was pretty flowent (excuse my spelling )
 
gibsonguy09 said:
hey ..... I am working on another verse on my song. Thanks i think you habe improved i think adn i hope i will to :confused: By the way the song is kewl. I think i put a tune to it and it was pretty flowent (excuse my spelling )
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If you stick with it, and research a lot, you will improve. Thanks for taking the time to read it! :cool:
 
Rokket said:
If you stick with it, and research a lot, you will improve. Thanks for taking the time to read it! :cool:
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anytime rokket. your stuff is cool.
 
Rokket said:
1966... damn I feel old... Thanks anyway! I will get around to recording it one day, but I kind of hear an 80's metal thing when I work on it...
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I hear metal things in my head too....But....I don't think it has anything to do with music.... :eek: :D
 
true-eurt said:
I hear metal things in my head too....But....I don't think it has anything to do with music.... :eek: :D
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:eek: ............
 
Here is the first verse from a song I wrote....Obvious which era it came from?

Mystery of Pluto
Nine fires bright
Boiling inner nature
Comes out cool as ice

And here is another...one verse and a chorus.....

Your touch is the dawn in the makin'
The blue,the blue,your eyes are heaven
The night is still night slowly falling
The dark,the dark,your arms reach out

And yesterday can't warm me
Yesterday isn't here
But tomarrows illusion can heal......

This second one I had my first studio experience with.Recording it and two other of my songs...I was so excited..and amazed at the difference in sound quality(had been basement recording) I couldn't believe it was me singing and playing the piano! The studio was in an underground cave...In fact , if I remember right..It Was called 'Underground Sound'..we just called it THE CAVE... :eek: ...A friend had purchased studio time for a demo tape..and gave me any leftover time...enough for 3 songs...I think my copy has deteriorated ...I don't have a Reel to Reel anymore to find out..The cost was like 75 an hr....It was a blast....!!!!

I don't know if my thoughts have really changed that much....but the music has taken a few twist and turns...other wise ....I would grow stagnate with the same ol...same ol.....see what you started Eddie..Now I'm diggin in old shoeboxes and and geetar cases...... :rolleyes: :D :)
 
true-eurt said:
Here is the first verse from a song I wrote....Obvious which era it came from?

Mystery of Pluto
Nine fires bright
Boiling inner nature
Comes out cool as ice

And here is another...one verse and a chorus.....

Your touch is the dawn in the makin'
The blue,the blue,your eyes are heaven
The night is still night slowly falling
The dark,the dark,your arms reach out

And yesterday can't warm me
Yesterday isn't here
But tomarrows illusion can heal......

This second one I had my first studio experience with.Recording it and two other of my songs...I was so excited..and amazed at the difference in sound quality(had been basement recording) I couldn't believe it was me singing and playing the piano! The studio was in an underground cave...In fact , if I remember right..It Was called 'Underground Sound'..we just called it THE CAVE... :eek: ...A friend had purchased studio time for a demo tape..and gave me any leftover time...enough for 3 songs...I think my copy has deteriorated ...I don't have a Reel to Reel anymore to find out..The cost was like 75 an hr....It was a blast....!!!!

I don't know if my thoughts have really changed that much....but the music has taken a few twist and turns...other wise ....I would grow stagnate with the same ol...same ol.....see what you started Eddie..Now I'm diggin in old shoeboxes and and geetar cases...... :rolleyes: :D :)
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Well, you may find some loose change!

The only time I was in a studio it was as an observer. I got to go into the Echo Chamber in Pasedena in the '80's. It was a Mastering house mostly, but they had 4 or 5 live rooms and a few other cool things. The ME was mixing down Dokken's album, but I wasn't allowed anywhere near it. I did get to meet George Lynch though, so that was cool.
 
Rokket said:
Well, you may find some loose change!

The only time I was in a studio it was as an observer. I got to go into the Echo Chamber in Pasedena in the '80's. It was a Mastering house mostly, but they had 4 or 5 live rooms and a few other cool things. The ME was mixing down Dokken's album, but I wasn't allowed anywhere near it. I did get to meet George Lynch though, so that was cool.
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Okay ...call me slow....loose change?....as in changes in the studios..or ...I'm going to become rich while cleaning Donald Trumps home , and finding such under his sofa cushions.... :rolleyes: ......... :D
 
true-eurt said:
Okay ...call me slow....loose change?....as in changes in the studios..or ...I'm going to become rich while cleaning Donald Trumps home , and finding such under his sofa cushions.... :rolleyes: ......... :D
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Me and a friend used to sit near bus stops and in laundrymats playing our guitars while he sang. People would wander past us and drop change in our guitar cases. One night we made almost $300.00 and didn't even notice that people were doing that. It was after that that we made conscious effort to play in public. We never did make that much in a single night again, but we still had fun. I learned a lot about acoustic playing that way.
 
Rokket said:
Me and a friend used to sit near bus stops and in laundrymats playing our guitars while he sang. People would wander past us and drop change in our guitar cases. One night we made almost $300.00 and didn't even notice that people were doing that. It was after that that we made conscious effort to play in public. We never did make that much in a single night again, but we still had fun. I learned a lot about acoustic playing that way.
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Okay,I see, but there won't be any of that in my geetar cases....hmmmm, well just maybe..once someone offered me money NOT to play my geetar!!!! :D So Rokket , why did you not comment on my lyrics?..Do they suck or something?....... :eek:
 
true-eurt said:
Okay,I see, but there won't be any of that in my geetar cases....hmmmm, well just maybe..once someone offered me money NOT to play my geetar!!!! :D So Rokket , why did you not comment on my lyrics?..Do they suck or something?....... :eek:
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Ooops, my head isn't in the game! I got stuck on that pulling stuff out of the guitar case thing and I had a flashback of what I told you about.

No, the lyrics are good. A tad bit lacking in visuals, but not bad. They lend themselves to poetry quite well. I have to rewrite 99% of what I do, and I am sure that your stuff goes through many different stages too.

Most of my changes happen when I start committing it to music. If I write an instrumental piece first, then it's a bit easier to do, but if I write the lyrics first, then things change quite a bit..
 
Rokket said:
Ooops, my head isn't in the game! I got stuck on that pulling stuff out of the guitar case thing and I had a flashback of what I told you about.

No, the lyrics are good. A tad bit lacking in visuals, but not bad. They lend themselves to poetry quite well. I have to rewrite 99% of what I do, and I am sure that your stuff goes through many different stages too.

Most of my changes happen when I start committing it to music. If I write an instrumental piece first, then it's a bit easier to do, but if I write the lyrics first, then things change quite a bit..
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The first one was lryics first....then music...and it really does go well with the music...Kind of a Ethereal feel to it, It is actually a pretty long song...I haven't sang it for 20 yrs....I did not put the music to it either ..my geetar buddy did.....And the second one, I did as I played the piano...I always heard the other instumental parts in my head..still do....Yes some songs do not even sound like the same song I started with...thanks for your imput :)
Even if I did have to pull it out of ya....! :eek: Ooooooooh Looooooola feel frisky tonight..... :p
 
true-eurt said:
The first one was lryics first....then music...and it really does go well with the music...Kind of a Ethereal feel to it, It is actually a pretty long song...I haven't sang it for 20 yrs....I did not put the music to it either ..my geetar buddy did.....And the second one, I did as I played the piano...I always heard the other instumental parts in my head..still do....Yes some songs do not even sound like the same song I started with...thanks for your imput :)
Even if I did have to pull it out of ya....! :eek: Ooooooooh Looooooola feel frisky tonight..... :p
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As long as that's the only thing you are pulling out of me, I should be OK... no entrails, knives.... :eek:
 
Rokket said:
As long as that's the only thing you are pulling out of me, I should be OK... no entrails, knives.... :eek:
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Hey ...your the sailor here ....not me!!!.......... :rolleyes:
As I had posted before ...Looooooola Luv Luv...not Freida Fite Fite........ :D
 
true-eurt said:
Hey ...your the sailor here ....not me!!!.......... :rolleyes:
As I had posted before ...Looooooola Luv Luv...not Freida Fite Fite........ :D
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It was just bad humor.... :o
 
Rokket said:
It was just bad humor.... :o
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Awwwwe.....Rokket, I wasn't scolding you....just running my wisecracking mouth... :rolleyes: ..Kindred spirits remember?.... :D Kindred does have the word kind in it(wonder what the red refers to?)...oh geeeeze..here I go getting all flowery again....Jake will be telling us to ......

GET A ROOM!!!!!!................. :D


Oh no....KIND-RED-SPIRITS = THE RED WEENIE CHICKLET????.....Well that is how Jakie views them.... :rolleyes: :D
Anyways ..thanks.......Loooooooola..................... :p
 
true-eurt said:
Awwwwe.....Rokket, I wasn't scolding you....just running my wisecracking mouth... :rolleyes: ..Kindred spirits remember?.... :D Kindred does have the word kind in it(wonder what the red refers to?)...oh geeeeze..here I go getting all flowery again....Jake will be telling us to ......

GET A ROOM!!!!!!................. :D


Oh no....KIND-RED-SPIRITS = THE RED WEENIE CHICKLET????.....Well that is how Jakie views them.... :rolleyes: :D
Anyways ..thanks.......Loooooooola..................... :p
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Wow, lack of sleep makes you ramble! :D

You shouldn't yell out that get a room part so loud, might start a rumor! :eek: :D
 
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