Original Song (I'm Depressed)

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Hi guys. This is a song I wrote a while ago and posted in the clinic and people said to redo it 'cause it was a bad recording, so I did that.
Can you give me feedback?

Just anything that bugs you and needs fixing. I spent a few hours mixing it and can't tell anymore, and need more ears on it. Thanks!

https://soundcloud.com/suicidevan/im-depressed
 
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The song had kind of a nice character to it.

The vocal and the drums sound like they're in one spot and the guitars, synth, and bass sound like they're in another. Guitar sounds slightly out of tune.

Vocal is pretty pitchy. But that's what kind of gives the song characters. Kind of like the Violent Femmes.
 
TripleM said:
The song had kind of a nice character to it.

The vocal and the drums sound like they're in one spot and the guitars, synth, and bass sound like they're in another. Guitar sounds slightly out of tune.

Vocal is pretty pitchy. But that's what kind of gives the song characters. Kind of like the Violent Femmes.
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Thanks for your feedback, tripleM. I agree the vocal is pitchy, and I wanted to keep working on it but my family came home so I stopped. I'll redo it at some point.

Do you have any suggestion on what I can try to do to get the instruments to sound like they're in the same space? This is something I've been reading about a lot but still really struggling with.
 
How feasible would it be to transpose this up a few steps? The biggest weakness I'm hearing is that you're having a lot of trouble hitting the low notes.

Otherwise, the relative levels of things seem pretty coherent; maybe the vocals are a tad loud, but not much.
 
Yeah, the song is a couple steps too low for your voice. But other than that, it sounds fine.
 
VomitHatSteve said:
How feasible would it be to transpose this up a few steps? The biggest weakness I'm hearing is that you're having a lot of trouble hitting the low notes.

Otherwise, the relative levels of things seem pretty coherent; maybe the vocals are a tad loud, but not much.
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thanks steve. i agree the vocal is off key. it's weird because when i wrote it it was so natural in this key so i don't know what happened (i get nervous recording so maybe it's tension).
i will try it again in this key after some practice, and if i can't do it i'll have someone else sing it or i'll transpose it. if anyone wants to collaborate pm me!
 
Chordify takes SoundCloud and YouTube music and spits out chords. I just put yours in because I wanted to see what key you were in.
 
nice Nola. The cymbals are rather loud. I was dying to hear a little synth lead or xylophone-type sound after the first chorus, then go into another verse. You should make this into a legit song...take it another few sections. this is good dude
 
andrushkiwt said:
nice Nola. The cymbals are rather loud. I was dying to hear a little synth lead or xylophone-type sound after the first chorus, then go into another verse. You should make this into a legit song...take it another few sections. this is good dude
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Thanks for the feedback, Andru. Maybe I'll make it longer or an alternate version.
Did the mix sound okay other than the cymbals? Can you tell me what headphones or monitors you listened on? I notice on one set of headphones the high end is hyped, so I'm wondering if they're hyping the cymbals b/c on my good set they sound just right.
 
I'm with the others. You're scraping the bottom of your vocal range. Like andrushkiwt suggests, it would be worth filling out the composition and adding some kind of lead instrument to the arrangement. It's promising.
 
I like the original more, it had a unique spirit. The vocal on here sounds a little like it was superimposed in a not-so-good way. Could be fixed with some fx though maybe?
 
easlern said:
I like the original more, it had a unique spirit. The vocal on here sounds a little like it was superimposed in a not-so-good way. Could be fixed with some fx though maybe?
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? did you listen to the track in the OP? was this a cover?
 
Hi Nola,
I thought the music was great, but the vocal needs work. I am a pro-autotune activist. Also, your song reminded me of Weezer's Buddy Holly...sounds like they used a doubled vocal. Maybe be that would sound good on your song.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kemivUKb4f4
 
andrushkiwt said:
? did you listen to the track in the OP? was this a cover?
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it's an original song. i think he means because i posted an old/demo version of the song once before, and he liked that one better. i can understand why -- it was more raw and had a better vocal.

Jessica_X said:
Hi Nola,
I thought the music was great, but the vocal needs work. I am a pro-autotune activist. Also, your song reminded me of Weezer's Buddy Holly...sounds like they used a doubled vocal. Maybe be that would sound good on your song.
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thanks for liking the music, jessica. i agree the vocal stinks. i will try to tune it and see what happens. usually that just makes me sound like a glitchy robot.
i don't really know how to double track vocals. every time i try it there's a weird echo. i must be doing it wrong.

oh and thanks for your feedback robus and easlern.
 
Nola said:
it's an original song. i think he means because i posted an old/demo version of the song once before, and he liked that one better. i can understand why -- it was more raw and had a better vocal.



thanks for liking the music, jessica. i agree the vocal stinks. i will try to tune it and see what happens. usually that just makes me sound like a glitchy robot.
i don't really know how to double track vocals. every time i try it there's a weird echo. i must be doing it wrong.

oh and thanks for your feedback robus and easlern.
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i use Melodyne, but don't correct this! i think the vocal intricacies make it what it is. it wouldn't be the same if the whole thing were pitch perfect everywhere. my $0.02
 
andrushkiwt said:
i use Melodyne, but don't correct this! i think the vocal intricacies make it what it is. it wouldn't be the same if the whole thing were pitch perfect everywhere. my $0.02
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maybe i should add a line "i'm depressed about this vocal" haha
 
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