fritsthegirl
Taste of home
Hey FTG. I really like the melody on this one. It's probably gonna stick in my head for the rest of the night and that's exactly what you want!! Good performance on the vocals, too. Lyrically, it is spot on.
Mix-wise, I have some suggestions. Instead of cutting, pasting, panning wide and delay one track, I think it would sound nicer if you sang all the BGV tracks (bgv = background vox). It will also help glue the song together if the BGV's weren't the only thing panned way out to the sides. As it is now, they kind of are off on their own out there.I would suggest a little more instrumentation and pull the bgv's off the sides; set them at about 50% panned. Record some minor counter-melodies and place them way out there. Guitar licks, embellishments, a synth pad or something. IDK... Just so the bgv's aren't alone.
Lastly, I think the lead vocal can come up a bit. Lovely voice, don't hide it.
Nice to see you putting stuff up here again.
Ah poor you - having this tripe ringing in your ears. I did a bit more work on the vocals today. I'm not sure if what I did hits everything you mention here, but I tried.
Thanks for the feedback, really valuable for me to hear.
fritsthegirl
Taste of home
I like it!
This really catches the spirit (or lack of spirit) of Facebook. Great tune, reminds me almost a little of the antifolk scene (Moldy Peaches, Jeffrey Lewis etc) in New York, but still unique.
I might suggest some background vocals during the "Share it 'round" parts. I hear some oohing and aaahing there in the back of my mind. Just a suggestion.
Sweet! I tried it, think it works. Felt the 'Share it round' parts were a bit empty too, so yours was a good suggestion. Cheers! See what you think & thanks for checking it out.
dainbramage
Well-known member
Sweet! I tried it, think it works. Felt the 'Share it round' parts were a bit empty too, so yours was a good suggestion. Cheers! See what you think & thanks for checking it out.
Amazing, that is almost precisely the melody I heard in my head for the background vocals. I also think the mix is better on the second one. Good work!
fritsthegirl
Taste of home
Steenamaroo
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Don't be freaked out.
I'd recommend just toying around with an eq and seeing what happens.
Here's anexample of a basic roll-off / mid cut.
Just think of the eq on an old hifi, but with more options.
dobro
Well-known member
Brilliant. My favorite one of yours so far. You're getting better. This one sounds like you were raised on the Kinks. Good genes.
Second mix is way better. They only thing I'd be trying to do with it is... the drums are really ballsy in the opening, but they get all tame and clicky and canned when the main vocal verses start, so I'd be trying to get a bit more body into the drum part when the singing starts.
Just magic.
Mr Clean
AKA Teddy Wong
2nd Mix sounds much, much better to me. Double vocals sound really good and the extra vocals in the chorus really bring it out.
Top stuff. Good to see you growing in confidence with your performance and recording.
Just for you, this is what we ate today. (Admittedly, I forgot about it in the over and nearly cremated it)
Top stuff. Good to see you growing in confidence with your performance and recording.
Just for you, this is what we ate today. (Admittedly, I forgot about it in the over and nearly cremated it)
rayc
retroreprobate
New mix is great.
Does the bass play all the way through?
It's cool at the intro then goes underground diue to the bottom end of the guitar.
If you make a small negative notch in the bassier rhythm guitar at around 3kh it might allow the top end of the bass appear or do the roll off thing with that guitar.
Excellent song.
Does the bass play all the way through?
It's cool at the intro then goes underground diue to the bottom end of the guitar.
If you make a small negative notch in the bassier rhythm guitar at around 3kh it might allow the top end of the bass appear or do the roll off thing with that guitar.
Excellent song.
Chili
Site Moderator
The 2nd mix is much better all the way around. Good job.
The oohing and ahhhing suggestion worked out well. Plus you pulled a guitar or two out to the sides. Both changes really makes a difference.
The oohing and ahhhing suggestion worked out well. Plus you pulled a guitar or two out to the sides. Both changes really makes a difference.
JimmyS1969
MOODerator
I must say this is now stuck in my head. The melody is quite infectious.
I have nothing to add that the others haven't already tapped into. Great tune FTG!
I have nothing to add that the others haven't already tapped into. Great tune FTG!
ido1957
9K Gold Member
Yes now I think the vocals are right where they need to be. The ending I would try and keep the level on the vocals up a bit longer I'm hearing it fade at the end of the last few lines. I would keep them consistent then a final fade where you have it. What eqing did you do because it worked perfectly whatever you did.
fritsthegirl
Taste of home
fritsthegirl
Taste of home
Oh yeh the Kinks, I didn't really hear that until you said. Sweet - I do love me some Kinks.
Hmm I wonder if I looked at this last night now or not. I'll have to have another listen later, I did the second mix pretty quick, and under the influence of a couple of beers. I think I turned the drums down....to give more to the vocals. Damn, drinking beer and mixing is fun, but I can never remember what I did.
fritsthegirl
Taste of home
2nd Mix sounds much, much better to me. Double vocals sound really good and the extra vocals in the chorus really bring it out.
Top stuff. Good to see you growing in confidence with your performance and recording.
Just for you, this is what we ate today. (Admittedly, I forgot about it in the over and nearly cremated it)
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Ah great, thanks for checking in again Mr. I've received some really sound advice on this tune, that I seem to have understood and been able to execute. Usually a lot of it goes over my head or I can't quite get it sounding right. I think I'm finally hearing everything across the EQ spectrum. I have no idea if that makes sense. It's been great how quickly this song came together though. After months of not coming up with anything but half baked ideas I was starting to think my HR career was over and the most short-lived one ever.
Man, that PIE looks amazin'!! Flavour?
fritsthegirl
Taste of home
Thanks Ray. Nah, the bass doesn't go the whole way through. I couldn't do it. Maybe I'll keep working at it, but I gave up and thought I'd add two tracks of harmonica in its place instead. One of them I lowered by an octave. It seemed to fill the space no bass had left, but maybe it's not quite enough.
fritsthegirl
Taste of home
The 2nd mix is much better all the way around. Good job.
The oohing and ahhhing suggestion worked out well. Plus you pulled a guitar or two out to the sides. Both changes really makes a difference.
Cool. I'm glad to hear. Thanks for the help man!
fritsthegirl
Taste of home
I don't even think I did any EQing in the end, just adjusted the volume on the drums, panning & volume on the guitars I think, and eased off the reverb on the vocal tracks. I can't even remember exactly what I did now, but it seems to work.
Thanks for the advice Ido, much appreciated.
Mr Clean
AKA Teddy Wong
Over, nah. You're doing good. Don't worry if the music doesn't come all the time. Just let it come when it does and catch the ideas. That's when the best stuff comes out, in my opinion. The forced songs always sound just that.
It was a special pie. Steak and onion with peas, carrots and mushrooms in a homemade gravy. I call it Poison Pie. It's well nice.
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Crazy Luke
New member
Was the lead and gang vox from the same girl - It sounds like it. If you could have tracked at least one more female vox, it would have sounded less home-studioish.