Woke Up Dead

[RAMI]

Hey guys,

Here's a new one. I just finished recording vocals and then mixed it down right away, so I'm pretty sure my ears are way off. Any time I focus on any one particular instrument or vocal, it seems too loud. So, I think my ears are so fatigues that everything seems loud.

Any help on the levels or anything else is always much appreciated.

Thanx

EDIT:

Sorry.....took it down for now.

 

[JimmyS1969]

Yay I'm First! lol

Another great song, even though you suck. He he he. Just kidding man.

I have one of those things I hear in my head again. This time, it not a vocal, but a guitar transition (added track) of sort at both bridges to chorus ("I'm not trying to bring you down
I don't want to be your hero I won't wear a crown"). Not even going to joke about a kazoo here. Just seems to need something there in 'my head'. Maybe an arpeggio or accent solo track that leads into the chorus. Then I would add another guitar track accenting the heavy riff during the chorus to add depth to the build of the tune. But who am I to say. I just hang out here.

Anyway, great friggen song dood. Again.

 

[rayc]

I love the ending.
Very tasty piece of work all round RAMI.
You're guitar tone is even better than last track.
I enjoyed the solo section - was that forward & backward guitar?
Sounded cool.
If this is done with fried ears I can't wait until you've some time to refresh & get back at it.

 

[rpm61]

Another fine song and recording here to my ears. You've several things I really like, the way the rhythm guitar plays with the bass like they are one instrument, it works well with a heavy song because it creates some thick bones to hang all the rest on. The second rhythm is great, occupies a higher band and you place those chords in all the right places, really good work. I LOVE the dual lead parts after the first chorus, is that a backwards track in there? Or level automation? It sounds awesome and I was hoping for a return to that in a fade out at the end. The vocal is pro as usual. I like the lyrics too, is "the other side of the other side of tomorrow's yesterday " this side of today? I might like the kick up a touch, and maybe the snare with a little more reverb too, but it really sounds good as is. Great job.

 

[RAMI]

Yay I'm First! lol

Another great song, even though you suck. He he he. Just kidding man.

I have one of those things I hear in my head again. This time, it not a vocal, but a guitar transition (added track) of sort at both bridges to chorus ("I'm not trying to bring you down
I don't want to be your hero I won't wear a crown"). Not even going to joke about a kazoo here. Just seems to need something there in 'my head'. Maybe an arpeggio or accent solo track that leads into the chorus. Then I would add another guitar track accenting the heavy riff during the chorus to add depth to the build of the tune. But who am I to say. I just hang out here.

Anyway, great friggen song dood. Again.

Thanx Jimmy. That part you're talking about does need something. Another thing I noticed about it is that it's not strong enough to be the same part all three times lyrically. The whole "Bring you down" and "Hero" part should be different lyrics every time it comes around. Right now, I'm treating it like a hook that should be repeated, but it's not that kind of part, I don't think.

I also will probably re-do some other vocal lines when I re-do that part.

Thanx buddy.

 

[RAMI]

I love the ending.
Very tasty piece of work all round RAMI.
You're guitar tone is even better than last track.
I enjoyed the solo section - was that forward & backward guitar?
Sounded cool.
If this is done with fried ears I can't wait until you've some time to refresh & get back at it.

Another fine song and recording here to my ears. You've several things I really like, the way the rhythm guitar plays with the bass like they are one instrument, it works well with a heavy song because it creates some thick bones to hang all the rest on. The second rhythm is great, occupies a higher band and you place those chords in all the right places, really good work. I LOVE the dual lead parts after the first chorus, is that a backwards track in there? Or level automation? It sounds awesome and I was hoping for a return to that in a fade out at the end. The vocal is pro as usual. I like the lyrics too, is "the other side of the other side of tomorrow's yesterday " this side of today? I might like the kick up a touch, and maybe the snare with a little more reverb too, but it really sounds good as is. Great job.

Thanx a lot guys. I really appreciate that.

Hey, I never have a problem with someone saying the drums should come up a bit. I always have room for more drums

The solo is actually the same part reversed on top of itself, if that makes sense. I played the solo, reversed it, and put the original and the reversed on top of each other.

Like I said above, I'm not 100% happy with all the vocals and some of the lyrics. I like the verses, but the choruses can be better, I think.

Thax a lot for the comments.

 

[JimmyS1969]

Thanx Jimmy. That part you're talking about does need something. Another thing I noticed about it is that it's not strong enough to be the same part all three times lyrically. The whole "Bring you down" and "Hero" part should be different lyrics every time it comes around. Right now, I'm treating it like a hook that should be repeated, but it's not that kind of part, I don't think.

I also will probably re-do some other vocal lines when I re-do that part.

Thanx buddy.

You know I would never fuck with what you do. You got 'you' down. I just make suggestions as to the first thing I hear when listening to your songs the first time. Then I go away, cuz you likely already knew what I heard.

 

[RAMI]

You know I would never fuck with what you do. You got 'you' down. I just make suggestions as to the first thing I hear when listening to your songs the first time. Then I go away, cuz you likely already knew what I heard.

No , man. All opinions and comments are very helpful. I don't really know what the hell I'm doing, I just wing it.

Actually, I took the song down for now. I put it up too soon and it's not ready. The chorus is weak, I kind of rushed finishing it and it shows. I'm going to re-work it and put it back up in a week or so. I apologize to those of you who commented already.

If a mod can close this thread, I would greatly appreciate it. I need to work on this a little more. It can be a great song, but it isn't right now.

 

[Atom Bomb]

Man, i come on here now like once a year and you take it down??? What gives?

Bah i am sure it is typical Rami awesomeness.

 

[Greg_L]

Yup, we just got blue-balled.

 

[JimmyS1969]

No , man. All opinions and comments are very helpful. I don't really know what the hell I'm doing, I just wing it.

Actually, I took the song down for now. I put it up too soon and it's not ready. The chorus is weak, I kind of rushed finishing it and it shows. I'm going to re-work it and put it back up in a week or so. I apologize to those of you who commented already.

If a mod can close this thread, I would greatly appreciate it. I need to work on this a little more. It can be a great song, but it isn't right now.

Sorry man, you would have to talk to an Admin to delete an on topic thread. I could actually be bribed to do it, but the song was really good to begin with and I don't need more dance lessons from white guys. lol!

I'm not sure why you took it down man. It was already really fucking good!

 

[RAMI]

Sorry man, you would have to talk to an Admin to delete an on topic thread. I could actually be bribed to do it, but the song was really good to begin with and I don't need more dance lessons from white guys. lol!

I'm not sure why you took it down man. It was already really fucking good!

Thanx Jimy, but I didn't ask anyone to delete anything. I asked if we could close the thread so that it doesn't keep getting bumped to the top of the page every time someone posts. Either way, it's not that important.

I'll put the song up again in a few days. I just needed to change a couple of lines. Thanx man.