I have a new song! "On The Edge"

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to nice of a song to b ruined by bad rapper. the cat on the first verse dont cut it. to b strait up honest wit you i felt like stopin the song half way first verse.

beats nice, raps suck to be a 100 wit you. chorus sick as fuck tho. keep at it. the singer should get togeter wit sum other dude i heard right on this place a few days ago that dude can rap forgot the name n smokin a blunt so i aint going outa my way for that. :D but that cat with whoever sing this im guessin u dammmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm. would love to see that right there.

or get yourself a local raper that compliments ya tracks. thats it im outttt homey. keep doing ur thing.
 
I have to be honest, lol, your comment confused me.

Did you mean just the guy on first verse wasn't felt,
Or that his, and my verse (2nd verse) were both not felt?

And Yes, I'm also on the hook.
 
both my dude n trust me i hate sounding like a hater. ur verse is beter than that first dude by far but its not as tight as ur singin to be a hundred. dope song but its lackin with the raps has potential but wud need some good rappers on it to take it to that next level.

productions nice an shit an like i said song has potential to be bangin but the raps so annoyin in the beginin that ur already in bad mood befor u get to that hook. lol. then wit the second verse ya just want to get to the hook so u can hear it again. feelin the lyrcis but delivery is weaak my dude specially that first kid.

two cents, use them wiselyy.
 
Once again, a little confused lol.

I'm wondering what I could do to make it better then, in your opinion.
Since you didn't really say what was wrong with my verse, aside from that the hook was so good you just wanted to hear it again.

Just looking for a little constructive criticism.
 
HOMEY I DUN LIKE THE RAPPIN HOW MUCH SIMPLER CAN IT GET SHIT! lmao. i cant give constructive cuz id say to get beter at rapin but then again is ur style. u might be good at what u do i just wudnt be come a fan cuz im not feeling the vocalists except for that hook but the rapers is mediocre.
 
Lol I gotta be honest, that was disrespectful.

But, could you link me to some rappers that you enjoy?
That you think would be good
 
OK, 1st verse singing is not stealer. Your voice is OK, but it seems to me to be winey. You might do the vox over again and try different approaches. I'm currently recording a rapper friend of mine with my analog set up and will dump to digital to burn Cd's. It's going well so far. Good luck.
 
My voice is really low lol...
Are we listening to the same songs?
 
Basick Musick said:
Lol I gotta be honest, that was disrespectful.

But, could you link me to some rappers that you enjoy?
That you think would be good
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u know what ur music is perfect. ya killin everyone. lol, will you accept that feed then?

apologize homey i dun want to come off disrespetful but it seems ur just neglecting the feed until u hear sum u like.

easy:

viniez paz / jedi mind tricks
immortal t
lupe
jigga
ill bill

rapers that have that unique sound in they voice and that have a slick flow. the list goes on as long as is good i like it simple as that. im not hater like i said n u can check i left some other dude on this forum praise cuz his rappin was that good. i give props where pros is due so lay off and take it my man. u wont get too far battling evry one who is not feelin ur music or think it aint that good. i said keep it up and wish ya good.

im out.
 
Lol I didn't say I expected love on everything,
It's just you weren't "Helping" anything.

You were just saying "This is good, That Sucked"
There wasn't anything helpful about it like, work on these aspects, or be more on point, etc.

-That's- what I'm looking for.
 
I think the first rapper doesnt sound as suited to this as you...near the end of the verse if you take away any backing its like its just some inexperienced kid talking in the mic, your verse is stronger, maybe if his vocal was taken down a notch, its just a bit too pronounced imho...Im not sure what Ruffcut was critisising with you...some of the lyrics could have had a slighlty sharper delivery..around the "inner being" lyric..but overall I think yours suit what you're doing..the hooks great as well

werd 4real etc etc repeat to fade ;)
 
Thank you! Some actual criticism I can work with here.

I thought maybe his vocal was a Db or so too loud, and that's my mistake there lol.
I actually owed him a verse and chorus for doing some graphics work for me, and this was the song he picked out to get me on haha.

The inner being line, I admit seemed a little rushed on my part.

I'll keep these into consideration next song!
 
Basick Musick said:
Thank you! Some actual criticism I can work with here.

I thought maybe his vocal was a Db or so too loud, and that's my mistake there lol.
I actually owed him a verse and chorus for doing some graphics work for me, and this was the song he picked out to get me on haha.

The inner being line, I admit seemed a little rushed on my part.

I'll keep these into consideration next song!
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you could put his vocals through a little anolog delay and a little distortion when you bring them down an see if that blends them in with the mood of the song better???


cool either way
 
Don't care for the chorus... The samples of the keys are "cheap" esp the orchastra one. A real guitar track in this, distorted would fit well. (do NOT use a keyboard to do it lol). I totally hear this as a cross over tune with guitar. Good stuff... Add the guitar, ax the first dudes vocal and thank me later :)
 
Had a thought when I went to grab my smokes... Take the same words the first dude is "singing" and his "verses" and have a female do them in a higher register. That with the guitar and you're talking man.
 
Hello, the music was very cool, i had no problems with the singers, yeah, the first one is kind of shocking at first, but i get use to him later. My only add is that you need a DeEsser, the "Ts" and "Ss" are too loud.

Good Job man... Keep Rapping ( i usually say Keep Rocking :D )
 
TaintedDb said:
Had a thought when I went to grab my smokes... Take the same words the first dude is "singing" and his "verses" and have a female do them in a higher register. That with the guitar and you're talking man.
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I just have to make sure I'm understand you right,
By "First dude" do you mean the guy on the hook (Me) or the first guy rapping?

I -THINK- you mean me lol,
And I will go back and give it a try.

I'd have to get ahold of my friend to come to the studio! ahah
 
kcearl said:
you could put his vocals through a little anolog delay and a little distortion when you bring them down an see if that blends them in with the mood of the song better???


cool either way
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He says the truth. I feel the vocals were far to removed from the rest.
 
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