Unfortunately when you put things on the internet opinions soon follow. If opinions that run contrary are off the table, then yank the thread from the forum and have a nice day. Otherwise hope people share what they honestly feel. A bunch of yesmen is likely how Version 2 came about...
BTW, thanks for removing my comment on soundcloud. I've re-added it in case you change your mind and don't want to be tyrannical.
I kinda like the synth at the end of the first version, but don't mind
the acoustic breakdown either. If you want a point by point analysis, ask. For starters, the constant accompanying jangly and distracting acoustic rhythm... that's not a welcome addition. The "realistic" rhythm tone is somewhat grating.
The original's was as well and it was one thing I addressed in the mix.
Having been around for a bit, I know sterilization when I hear it. It may be YOUR song, but if you want people to actually listen to it, then you should be listening to the input.
Although I would not rate the mixing as bad, there's several areas that could use some improvement. If you want to learn from this song, post the it in the MP3 Mixing Clinic and open it up to some feedback/criticism. We often discuss what's right as well as what's wrong, so if looking for some stroking you'll get that as well as some mild mannered spanking.
Fwiw, I could care less if you used any of the mixes here. The song is what's important.