You got me singing this song

[Irwin abrigo]

Hi everyone, I am kindly asking for your feedback on my song lyric. I have rewritten this song so many times and this is what it looks like now.

You got me singing this song
©2014 Irwin abrigo
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(verse 1)
You told me I was the guy
you've been looking for
And as the days follow nights
We will be rapped up in each other's arms
You said your love was true
And it will never die
Now you're gone
leaving me and I
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(Lift)
In my bed I can't sleep at nights
Thinking of the things we use to do
Pretending you're here holding my pillow tight
You're not by my side
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(Chorus)
Where ever you are my darling
Near or far I'm performing, my love is strong
I have a broken heart and you're the cause
I'm standing here right now singing this song
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(verse 2)
Remember gifts we'd exchanged
Loved that we had shared
And when we were alone that night
Held hands for the first time in the moonlight
We looked up to the skies
And saw the stars above
Said they shined
Just for two of us
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(Lift
When we kissed I felted you loved me
You said our love was meant to be
Completely confessed heard you found someone new
I'm in love with you
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(Chorus
Where ever you are my darling
Near or far I'm performing, my love is strong
I have a broken heart and you're the cause
I'm standing here right now singing this song
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(Bridge)
You got me singing this song
You got me singing this sad song
In front of this crowd
You got me singing this song
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(Chorus)
Where ever you are my darling
Near or far I'm performing, my love is strong
I have a broken heart and you're the cause
I'm standing here right now singing this song
(Repeat)

 

[YanKleber]

That's a nice candy love lyrics. Great for underwear drooler teenagers to hear while suffer of a devastated heart in bed late at night. Oh my fifteens...

 

[songcatmusic]

It's a nice piece. What kind of music are you thinking to put onto this song? Make sure the lines are flowing. There are a few things that probably need some tweaking for example the lines
"Now you're gone
leaving me and I"

Why not change it to
"Now you're gone
leaving me behind"

 

[Irwin abrigo]

YanKleber & songcatmusic, I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment on my song lyric.

songcatmusic. I have "leaving me behind" for that line already but to me it is not sounding so sweet when I sing it with the melody I have for this song.

Thank you very much for the reply.

Irwin

 

[songcatmusic]

No problem Irwin. Post the song when you have it produced.