Wait for your love (Christian tune)

[Nightfire]

Here's a worship/praise song I wrote a little while back, will try to record it soon.

Wait for your Love (Mike Duerksen, Copyright 2007)

V1
God if you’re there, please hear my prayer
I need you now, tonight I want you forever
And I’ll wait for your love as my world collides
And I’ll fall on my knees, as I cry out this prayer while I...

Chorus
Lift up my hands, and wait for your love to catch me here
I'll just lift up my hands and I’ll wait, and I’ll wait

V2
And it has been a while, since I have talked to you God
I’ve been busy with life, and somehow forgot who you were
I was such a fool, tried to do it on my own
As I fall down once again, I give it all up to you and...

Chorus
Lift up my hands, and wait for your love to catch me here
I'll just lift up my hands and I’ll wait, and I’ll wait

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There will be a bridge yet, just gotta work on the lyrics and chords.
And please, lets not make this about religion/faith etc.
Suggestions, changes, anything welcome.


Mike

 

[up-fiddler]

And I’ll wait for your love as my world collides
And I’ll fall on my knees, as I cry out this prayer while I...

Chorus
Lift up my hands, and wait for your love to catch me here
I'll just lift up my hands and I’ll wait, and I’ll wait

I really like these four lines together. If you are rewriting anyway, consider making them the chorus. Just a thought. I like the way they emphasize patient faith and love. They are great components of all genres of music. Not just inspirational music.

 

[mjr]

I really like these four lines together. If you are rewriting anyway, consider making them the chorus. Just a thought. I like the way they emphasize patient faith and love. They are great components of all genres of music. Not just inspirational music.

I agree.

Keep up the good work!

 

[ido1957]

Super strong lyrics Mike... I was moved by them on the very first read through, and every time after that. Maybe I'm just an emotional kinda guy .....

I'm going to vote to keep the format the way it is . I like the feel of it now, with a sort of build up at the end of the verses that "crescendos" or "resolves" in the chorus... That's just my vote though. UF's suggestion has good merit also...

Really good.... post the next update when you get a chance....

 

[Frambo]

Nice. Like a Psalm. David would be proud
I dont know your melody (of course) and it depends on your emotion and phrasing when singing but the rhyme of the 1st line seems out of place (on paper) considering the rest of the lyrics not having any blatant rhymes, "God if you’re there, please hear my prayer", maybe? But I guess you're trying to convey the feeling it seems like God isnt there. What about "It seems you're not there, Lord hear my prayer" ?? Keep the rhyme ??
I like the "...world collides..." phrase too. I've been pondering your lyrics for a couple of days It may not need a bridge but I guess it depends if you get any more inspiration ~ there's the old up to the IV cord or maybe if its in a major key try a bridge jump up a minor 3rd e.g. key G, bridge starts Bb? Play around with a few cords and melodic twists and see if it triggers something. Frambo out

 

[Nightfire]

Thanks for all the feedback guys.
With the Chorus as it sits in the melody right now I cant really incorporate the 2 lines leading up to it like Up-Fiddler suggested unless I change the melody pretty drastically. In hindsight, it wouldve made more sense to write it the way Up-Fiddler suggested.
Frambo, I like the idea of switching the first line around, thank you. It's written in mayor key (G) and I'll try your suggestion to go the Bm once I come up with a decent melody/transition from chorus to bridge. Im still up in the air wether I should throw a bridge in or not, I'll write one and then make up my mind.
Once again, thanks for every feedback!


Mike

 

[Frambo]

Good luck ~ it could be worth trying a version using Upfiddlers idea ~ if it doesnt work it might turn into a new song Try the jump to Bb and see how you like it compared to Bm. It's a different tension. God bless.

 

[mark merton]

Nice Lyrics

Well done Mike. Bob Dylan would be proud of you! Nice lyrics indeed. I play keyboards with a Christian group but sometimes can't help feel that the lyrics are a bit soppy; these have depth and emotion without being soppy. Are you using a keyboard or guitar to create the music? Good lyrics are like good poetry - you scribble down ideas and inspiration comes in bits and pieces over time. Even Beethoven got into rows with those who printed his music - they were set to print en masse and he would sometimes send via express carriage changes made at the last moment! Anyway, I'm drifting here but yes the lyrics are good.