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[get2sammyb]

That was a joke by the way ^

Hi,

This song is Christian (obviously) but it is about my stuggle in how I cannot believe in aspects of the relgion. This particular song is about the fact that I can't imagine an afterlife, and the fact that I pray for God to help me believe, but I am getting no response, therefor my faith is questioned.

Lyrics

Anywhere and everywhere, I still believe that you'll be there
I saw the light, so why at night, do I still fear death
I prayed to you, asked for the truth, but nothing seems to pull me through
And this is why, I'm spiritually confused

And if I did not wake up again
Would you pick me up and take me in
Like the samaritan did for his enemy
You see, it maybe
That I am just writing this for comfort
So contort these words and fuck them over
Give them a meaning that lack contentment
For scientific suicide will one day convey the fact
That we are all petrified and hopeless

Anywhere and everywhere, I still believe that you'll be there
I saw the light, so why at night, do I still fear death
I prayed to you, asked for the truth, but nothing seems to pull me through
And this is why, I'm spiritually confused

I can't get these thoughts out of my head
I believe in God, I believe really I do
But I just cannot believe in an afterlife
And maybe, just maybe
I am clinging on to the hope of you
You say I "descended from heaven"
Then why can't I remember it, and imagine it
My impression of heaven, is a black cape
Whereby existence is persecuted and engulfed

Anywhere and everywhere, I still believe that you'll be there
I saw the light, so why at night, do I still fear death
I prayed to you, asked for the truth, but nothing seems to pull me through
And this is why, I'm spiritually confused

The two verses are poems, which are read.

Recording

In terms of the recording and mix, I am not feeling I am getting any better at this. It's clear I need a new mic and pop shield to remove all that horrible popping and clicking, but are there any ways I can improve the mix? I just don't think it sits.

 

[DonF]

You need better instruments, and you need to learn to play them more effectively.

You can't put rubbish sounds in, and expect to get something out that sounds like (name your favorite band). Not that rubbish sounds can't be put to good musical use, mind you. (Anyone remember Human League?) But think of them as an effect, to be used sparingly. All your sounds are squished into the middle of the sound spectrum. There isn't anything hitting the lows or the highs very well, except maybe for the cheesy ride cymbal sound. That slow-attack string patch is maddening.

As far as the playing goes: I ask you, can you picture a drummer playing the part that you programmed? I can't.

The vocal sound is not too far off the mark. Yeah, there are a few pops, but overall it's not bad. I think the main problem with the vocals is the melody -- it needs work. I'm a pretty good singer, but I don't think I could have done a better job of singing your melody.

Keep going -- you'll get there. I hope my comments are helpful to you.

Don

 

[get2sammyb]

You need better instruments, and you need to learn to play them more effectively.

You can't put rubbish sounds in, and expect to get something out that sounds like (name your favorite band). Not that rubbish sounds can't be put to good musical use, mind you. (Anyone remember Human League?) But think of them as an effect, to be used sparingly. All your sounds are squished into the middle of the sound spectrum. There isn't anything hitting the lows or the highs very well, except maybe for the cheesy ride cymbal sound. That slow-attack string patch is maddening.

As far as the playing goes: I ask you, can you picture a drummer playing the part that you programmed? I can't.

The vocal sound is not too far off the mark. Yeah, there are a few pops, but overall it's not bad. I think the main problem with the vocals is the melody -- it needs work. I'm a pretty good singer, but I don't think I could have done a better job of singing your melody.

Keep going -- you'll get there. I hope my comments are helpful to you.

Don

You are comments are very helpful, and I agree with you. Yeah it definitely needs "widening" doesn't it. And no I couldn't imagine a drummer playing it, but I guess drums are just there for experimental reasons.

I am tossing up between physically playing and recording acoustic guitar, or taking this electronica route. One would assume I got a long way to getting the electronica sounding good.

Thanks for putting me in my place