Vote on this for me please?

[jake-owa]

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I'm in the middle of the road.

Lyrics:

Yes I forgive everything that happened, and not just because it's in the past
I'm moving on with the brightest outlook yet, I see my future and I know my time to shine is at hand
It's taken so long to finally understand
But now I know why I've chosen this direction, despite the pain despite the fear despite the loss despite rejection
I'm moving on in a straight line this time our lives have been too intertwined....but that's fine

(chorus)
Let it die, let it die, let it die...let the sleeping dog lie
let it die, just let it die

So now you call me up to tell me that you miss the good old days, I miss the moment but I'll never miss your cruel ways
That's not to say I'm perfect, no one could ever make that claim
I've made my own mistakes and I've been ashamed but I won't play your game

(chorus)
Let it die, let it die, let it die...let the sleeping dog lie
let it die, just let it die

Yes I believe anything could happen, that doesn't mean I want it to, so no I won't get back to you.
No I won't get back to you

(chorus)
Let it die, let it die, let it die...let the sleeping dog lie
let it die, just let it die

 

[ashulman]

I assume you want songwriting comments. My opinion might not be worth much as this genre is a little out of my element. But you helped me with some comments so here goes! I don't think the lyrics in a tune like this are particularly important as the groove seems to be the main thing. Your lyrics are fine however. Now I prefer a little more melody but I think you know this type of tune better than I do and from what I hear on the radio, this sounds good. I still think a little musical diversion would help as it seems a bit repetitive in terms of the chord structure and the narrow melodic range. I would think about moving the melody up at some point or throwing in a bridge.