I read your last post (about blowing off steam) so I'm even a bit less sure about what you are looking for. So I guess I just tell you what I think...
I can say I like that little bass run in the middle. Had an interesting tone to it and it was a nice part.
More than a bit hissy. The vocals were almost inaudible. IMHO - if vocals are recorded, that means there's something to say. And so they should be brought up to a level that can be heard. I know you hinted they were bad, but I'm not sure placing them so low in the mix is the best way to deal with them. I'd say to bring them up anyway. What I could hear didn't seem to indicate that they're the worst thing I've heard.
Just my thoughts... Trip.