Three 14 year old idiots from central NY

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Hey...

We just formed a "band" called Seth Feldman (dont ask), we wrote some "music" and we were hoping we could get some feedback on some of it. It's all crap (were doin it in a bedroom on a 14 year old budget) but we would like some feedback anyways, so anything would be greatly appreciated.

Weve got a website at http://sethfeldman.cjb.net, where you can follow links to our music, or just go directly to http://www.nowhereradio.com/sethfeldman/.


Thanks,
Seth Feldman (Scott, Chris, Stephen)

Oh and some of you have probably heard the song entitled "Eloise" that I (Scott) recored by myself. I threw it in the singles section. (I added alot more.)
Thanks Again
- Scott
 
Anything....

Is it ok?
Does it suck?
What should we fix?

And dont mind the songs where stephen sings (you'll know it when u hear it, really off pitch, we gotta rerecord em anyways)

I think the one we would like the most feedback on is squint.

Thanks,
Scott
 
Well... I generally don't comment on the artistic side of things, since it's subjective, but sonically, you have a long way to go before the song stops sounding like a demo........

The beat box gets annoying really quickly and is ixed too loudly in the mix.

There is no hint of ambience around any of your tracks.... you need to be creating a sense of space around each instrument/vocal..........

I've certainly heard a lot worse -- but anyways, you're on the right track.......
 
You're 14? Man, with that qualifier, I am totally impressed. I'd use more panning (hard panning) because it would break up the monatony of the synth percussion. I'd also turn the vocal up a notch.

Now that I've said that, I'd like to add that the variety you've thrown into this song is really very cool and far above average at any age. I'm talking about the SONG, not the arrangement. Your instruments totally suck, but you know that. You can always start flipping burgers in a couple of years and buy some gear...but the creativity that is obviously present in this one song alone is something you can't buy...

You're 14?

If I were you, where you are in your life and your recording, I'd be damned proud of this. Cool for you.

:D
-chris
 
Hey...thanks both of you for the feedback!

Ya...I know...I told ya it would be crap. Its all synth stuff exept the vocals. We can play piano, drums, and a little bass but weve only got one mic so its hard to get drums and piano to sound good. And the synth bass sound much better (believe me). But as time goes on we earn some more cash...can buy some decent gear, more mics the sound will HOPEFULLY improve.

As for the musical parts...I will take your suggestions and try my best to make it sound at least somewhat half decent.

Thanks Alot,
Scott

PS - Im assuming you are both talking about Squint, or all the songs in general?
 
yeah...I listened to "squint."

Don't get discouraged, get motivated and stay there.

:D
 
Think I could get a little feedback on the song "Eloise"?

Its in the Singles section.

I had posted the song earlier and got a little positive feedback, Ive done a bit more, fixed some things, and I'd like to see what you think. Again, its all done w/ synth crap.

Thanks,
Scott
 
sounds dead on the same stuff i did when i was 14....ha...and i mean daed on. same kind of piano riffs, and drum sounding stuff.....and i'm only 16! ha.

luckily, with my beard i get the respect of a 20 year old when i'm recording.

not bad though, rock it up.
 
creatively, it sounds nice. Good composition. The piano synth sounds cool... agreeing with Blue on the beat box drums... I do like the progress you're making (from the 54 second version...)

Vocals seem to need more concentration to stay on tune, they kind of waver... some reverb would help give your mix depth... but don't go crazy and put it on everything!

Is there a way to separate each beat box sound into its own channel? If so, the snare sounds could use some 'verb by themselves... the maracas (whatever that sound is) could come down in volume a bit...

Yea keep workin on it :cool:


Chad
 
Hey...

I changed the 54 sec version quite a bit...and a new one has been posted. It should be about 1:30 long.

Thanks everyone for their suggestions and comments!!

Thanks Again,
Scott
 
Hey Scott,
I was wondering what happened to you.

Eloise sounds much better,the vocals are just right,panned perfect.
What else did you change?

Eloise is one of those names that is a song in itself.:)

Sunshine-Felt like I was watching a muppet movie.:D
That's a perfect imatation of Elmo.
Really cool,I liked it.

Good writing.
Need some reverb on the whistling though.

This is Duane's life.
Nice groove!
I thought the writing and production were very good.

The vocals aren't sitting right though.
A little to loud,and the reverb dosn't seem quite right.

I liked the little phone call though.
(Where have I heard that before!):D


You guys have some real talent,keep em coming.

Best to you,
Pete
 
ok im listening to "this is duanes life".
the music is well composed but i have to say that synth just isnt my "thang", when you get a bit of cash definately invest in some instruments as is will sound a heap better, and also recording gear.

singing wise, the lyrics are pretty cool. I dont know what sort of sound you were going for with the singing but my advice is put some more effort into it, eg. turn the vocals down but sing louder!

that song definately has potential though.

what style of music are you looking to get?
 
yeah its me again

i have the same feedback for "squint".

the piano sounded pretty damn good, but those synth drum let it down i think.

when your recording the singing just crank up the music and get lost in the music while your singin.
(damn i sound like a hippie)

anyway pretty good for 14.

i remember when i was 14 i had just started learn bass. im 17 now but still pretty crap.
if you want to listen to any of my stuff just do a search for my name.

keep playin though fellas

peace
 
sounds like the kind of stuff Ben Folds would have been working on when he was 14....I like it.

My biggest problem is that the vocals don't sit right with the synth stuff....I actually think the synth stuff has a quirky feel to it that is kind of refreshing...at least to me.

Ever heard of "Atom and his package"...heh, you could be the next..him :)

the vocal tracks just scream "radioshack mic into sblive! soundcard with no EQ"

like blue bear said...play with some EQ, and some different reverb/volumes on them....to get them to have some space...and to sit into the synth bed better.
 
Given the fact that you are 14....this is pretty cool. Definitely better than a lot of what I hear from guys your age. I do notice a similarity in the chord structure between the two songs but the vox is different enough to make it ok. Squint is pretty cool the way the vocal changes and then that lo-fi at the end....cool!
I think you have some talent for sure and I'll make a point to watch for your stuff. It's fun to watch musicians develop. keep playing!
 
Hey...thanks everyone for the feedback! I do agree with all of you that the synth crap sounds pretty bad...but thats all we can do right now. I have been playing around with some EQ and reverb to try and make it sound better but dont know really how to use EQ.

Thanks Again,
Scott
 
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