Think about The children

[Irwin abrigo]

Hello friends, I produced the full track (except for the piano chords). Feedback on the song's musical production and if pitching this song to an artist in the way it is, is advice-able.

Listen here;

 

[Manslick]

The sounds are beautiful. Some words are hard to understand.
The rhythm though needs to be smoothed out a lot.
Or something to humanize more.
Or redone entirely.
The vocals could be tighter rhythmically.
For a tune this dry it needs to be tight bro - tight.

 

[spantini]

Welcome back Irwin !! I like the singing, but like @Manslick points out, the rhythm needs to be smoother. Especially the percussion, I think.

 

[Irwin abrigo]

The sounds are beautiful. Some words are hard to understand.
The rhythm though needs to be smoothed out a lot.
Or something to humanize more.
Or redone entirely.
The vocals could be tighter rhythmically.
For a tune this dry it needs to be tight bro - tight.

I will redo entirely. Thanks!

 

[Irwin abrigo]

Welcome back Irwin !! I like the singing, but like @Manslick points out, the rhythm needs to be smoother. Especially the percussion, I think.

Thanks you for the comment and advice Spantini. I'd realy needed to know.