The Unknown Feeling - Lyrics Review

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Hi everyone I'm new on writing lyrics, so I would like to share this lyric for a review... I don't talk too much english so any help with gramma will help, even help changing some parts.

The Unknown Feeling
I feel it once, I can't say i like it
It took my life and put a stop
The pain I feel, it was too strong
That take my dreams and made it dust

It takes the Heart
It takes the Soul
It takes the Man
And destroys them all

It's the unknown feeling
That take the best of me
It's the unknown feeling
That take's me away

The word you said, was just a lie
That took me mind and confuse it all
I'm afraid too feel it once again
(still thinking xD)

It takes the Heart
It takes the Soul
It takes the Man
And destroys them all

It's the unknown feeling
That take the best of me
It's the unknown feeling
That kill me everyday...


I hope you like it, and as I said before, any help is apreciated
Thanks for reading it
 
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A better way to write the Chorus would be:

It takeS the Heart
It takeS the Soul
It takeS the Man
And destroyS THEM all
 
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