The power of pregnancy.............

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Hi all,

This is a little tune that I wrote when my girlfriend announced suddenly that she was pregnant.

It is called "A Baby, My Baby (Oh My God)".

http://www.nowhereradio.com/artists/album.php?aid=1746&alid=193

I would appreciate your comments on the mix, the song, the performance and random abuse for being such a selfish bastard.

Additionally, this version is 3:30 long => I have another verse and chorus but that would take the song to around 5:00. What do you think? Add it or leave it as it is?

Thanks,

:) Q.
 
OK, well sh*t happens

The song is cool. A few things on the recording.

It sounds really compressed to me. I would bring the vocals up just a touch. Let the song have some dynamics to it. Everything is the same level most of the way through. It also sounds like the high end has been rolled off. Brighten the vocals up just a touch, give them some air on top.

The playing and singing is well done.

Just my $.02
 
Smile it away?

Pretend you're happy?

Nah, keep it short.

I know about piling tracks up on momentous songs, but you know, sometimes less is more. The lines about 'my baby' would come across more powerfully if you started putting holes in the song. As it stands, the song takes up all the available space, if you know what I mean. Make it more spare, and it might invite the listener in...

Then somebody would get pregnant again...
 
dobro said:
Then somebody would get pregnant again...
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Turned out to be a false alarm and we are now happily married

:) Q.

Well most of the time anyway.... She just isn't the gear slut that I am :)
 
Love the intro.

Your voice reminds me so much of the band August Red...the were a local tempe band when I was in college...anyway.

The drums sound a bit lifeless...that is my only critisism...everything else sounds good. If you do want to stay happily married...don't ever play this song for your wife :)
 
terrible_buddhi said:
If you do want to stay happily married...don't ever play this song for your wife :)
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Too late!

I spun it to say that it really was a love song.....

:) Q.
 
damn dude, you should work for the government if she bought that line :D

now why the hell did someone shoot you 1 star...thats not cool. I would give you a couple if I could figure out how.
 
Cool tune, reminds me of an 80s band, can't think who (depeche mode maybe?) I think the vocal could be a little bigger sounding maybe a longer verb. Sounds good. Overall it sounds a little muffled especially the left guitar, not sure if there's a synth in there clouding it up a bit?

Nice song,

Ian..........
 
Thanks for your feedback, assistance and encouragement guys... I will create a new version and post it shortly.

In the meantime, I offer you this anecdote from a dinner party I attended this evening, which once again confirmed me as a future candidate for a vasectomy.

We were having dinner with uni friends of my wife. Darren related a story from the previous weekend where he had been having a picnic with his wife and three year old daughter, Emma.

Emma started to get tired, so Darren asked her is she wanted to bounce on his knee. Like most tired kids she said, "No!", started being stroppy and started chanting.

"I want to bounce on Daddy's knee, Knee, KNEE!"

They started packing up........

"I want to bounce on Daddy's leg, Leg, LEG!"

They had all the picnic stuff together and started for the car.....

"I want to bounce on Daddy's toes, Toes, TOES!"

They walked towards the car.........

"I want to bounce on Daddy's tummy, Tummy, TUMMY!"

They drew nearer the parking lot..........

"I want to bounce on Daddy's head, Head, HEAD!"

They approached two families, aged 9 -> 90, walking the other way....

"I want to bounce on Daddy's PENIS, PENIS, PENIS!", Emma yelled at the top of her voice.

Kathy maintains Darren turned white, stammered and nearly lost bladder control when he saw the other families staring at him in disgust and amazement. (I should add that Darren, my wife and their friend are all nerdy accountant types.....). And then the killer --

Darren, lost at sea, could only stutter in reply --

"Not today, darling. Daddy's tired."

At which point the other people starting dialling the Department of Community Services and Child Protection Agencies...........

I swear to God that this is a true story.

Now => do you see and really understand my reasons for writing this song :D ?

:D Q.
 
I'd personally leave it as it is.

Pretty cool QWERTY. :)

Agree with Dobro on the 'space' comment, and with 'lifeless drums' comment by terrible_buddy.

The bass sounds a little hollowish midrangy, like it's played through a guitarprocessor. Perhaps it's the part, but it sounds like the bass sound in my older songs (when I still was using my Korg AX1000G guitarprocessor for bass)

Haha, funny story. But where did Emma learn the word PENIS?
 
I guess

everybody feels that way at first.
I was on the road with my band for 90% of my first pregnancy.
I remember sitting on a hotel bed one afternoon a couple months before my first child was born and hulcinating a perfectly formed baby playing beside me on the bed.
That was when the REALITY started to finally hit me.
I quit the band 3 months after she was born.
 
Thanks guys - I can see where this sucks now - I am trying to beat it back into shape.

Thanks,

Ben.

Peds - Kathy and Darren don't like "baby" names for things, so "Penis" it was.....
 
Remix - Mud removed?

Hi,

I have posted a new mix of this song, A Baby My Baby (Oh My God), some new tracking a lot more time in creating the soundscape.

My last effort, as you can see above, was a muddy, compressed, lifeless mess. I think I have fixed that now in that this mix seems much more transferrable between systems.

http://www.nowhereradio.com/artists/album.php?aid=1746&alid=193

I would appreciate comments on the mix and the song itself.

Thanks,

:) Q.
 
I think you have a really cool piece here. Cool sound. Sounds pretty good for the most part. From an arrangment perspective Iit sounds pretty full all the time. I think dobro touched on this. It might add more interest and create more dynamics but dropping some instruments in and out. Maybe build to the big finish, but this is all just preference and ideas. Also, I think the guitar on the left might be sharing some frquencies with the vocals.

Very good work Qwerty!
 
you were really busy on this one man. I like all the parts. All the tones are good to me. The vocal could use a touch of sizzle. THe drums were a little hot until everything was in and up. Bass tone not bad but a little thin. Nice production but it gets really full early in the tune.
 
First, let me say, I love the effect of the song slowing down at the beginning. I assume you're recording on tape .... or .... can that actually be accomplished on a computer?

Very aggressive production. I like how one of the electrics mirrors the vocal.

You've panned everything nicely. It's got a good horizontal spread, but I'd like more depth.

Nice harmony work.

Sonically, it seems to me that you've chosen a lot of instruments that share the same frequency sprectrum. One of the great tips I've gotten off this board concerns eq. You might want to experiment with individually eq'ing tracks to eliminate redundant frequencies. For example, roll of the low end of the distorted electric. The bass and bass drum have got it covered. The guitar may sound shitty when you solo it, but may sound great in the overall mix and open it up a bit.

The strings sound pretty decent. I could use a good "string section". What synth are you using?

Cool ending.

BPOCO
 
cool tune

everything sounds well seperated to me

the lyrics sound pretty dark, for having a baby

of course I am the father two, 19 and 16, so I supose that effects my point of view on the subject
 
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