Keyboard intro being long? Hmm, I'll consider truncating it. It does feel kinda long.
Yeah, I've been playing drums as my primary instrument for 9 years now, when I first purchased recording gear the first thing I wanted to do was to be able to record my drums, so I feel I got it down. As far as the exaggerated stereo spread, meh. I've heard albums with wider spreads (especially on the monster sets, mine's only 3 toms), but I like it as it is. I guess growing up on Beatles albums made me partial to wide stereo spreads.
The bass is too overpowering on my Creative 5.1 PC speakers. It sounds nice on my monitors (
KRK RP-6's) but moving them to the Creative w/ subwoofers makes it overpowering. While I do have a very bass prominent/warm sound set up, this is too much, so I'm gonna do some tweaking. It is my Jazz Bass, and thanks for the Jack Bruce comment, I love that guy so much. I really started playing the bass back in June, when I bought my Fender.
As far as the boxy comment, I've been considering turning down my tape sim I run on the bass because it does sound kinda muddy, so I'll try that.
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Yeah, I have been rather lax on fixing the amateurness of the intro. Its more or less a live take from a Casio keyboard midi-in, and I did some midi tweaking. I may just hard quantize it though. Though judging from the comments, I may just shorten it. And that's not even the full intro, I left out the beginning of the intro (for your information I was inspired by Deep Purple's "Lazy", which had a 2-3 minute organ intro). As far as not sounding like keys, its a Hammond B3 emulator with heavy distortion....so it may not sound all that natural (again, heavy Jon Lord influence here).
Yeah, I didn't really notice the room sound in my drums until I started listening to the mix on my crappy headphones, which was well after everything was tracked (sans vocals). I record in a garage, unfortunately, but luckily its very dry (for a garage). I normally record with a heavy wool blanket/curtain gobo thing I built, but I didn't use it this time, because through my studio monitors I didn't really notice a difference. But on other sound systems, it comes out.

I'm happy enough with the performance to let the production deficiencies slide.
Anyway, here's my current mix w/ vocals:
And thanks for your comments! Keep them coming!