Song I made for my girlfriend

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It was interesting up until the first delay in the lyrics and I thought well, this may go somewhere and it didn't so I have to say that I would not listen again. Something needs to be added to make it interesting, like after that first delay of the vocals, come in with some hard, crushing beats and more stereo space usage. I don't know but it needs something. Good luck.
 
it's all in mono, which sounds a bit dull. I agree with trumpino, it just needs to be more interesting, there's not really much change or development.
 
Your voice has a tendency to creep out of tune on long notes or under strain, you need to watch that and perhaps edit the tuning if you can't perfect it naturally. As said above, it needs to develop. It could be quite good with something more to it.
 
If this is just a song to your girlfriend, this might just work fine. I don't know.

If you're looking for something more, then there is some work to do. As people said, it doesn't go anywhere. It's the same tune line after line. You need to add more melody. My opinion anyway.

I'm hearing some pitchiness. It seems like you can carry it off, but there are more than a few spots where the pitch is off.

The mix gets chaotic in spots. The spot where you echo the lines gets to be a mash of noise. At about 2:30 there's so much going on it's chaos.
 
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