Something less chauvinistic

[Folkie]

I think it needs a bridge--something about sorcery and bewitching...Needs a title too. True thought I needed a spanking for the talking politically incorrect blues one.

A woman is like water
Like a river through a canyon
If given time she’ll turn a rock to sand
As she gently flows around you
You can’t hold her, you can’t stop her
She’s beyond the strength of any mortal man

She the wave upon the shoreline
She’s the power of the sea
She’s the force that’s irresistible
A Maelstrom swirling free
She’s a well that won’t run dry
She’s the rainfall from the sky
And a Godsend to a thirsty man like me

A woman is like air, now
She’s like soft and scented breezes
She will linger on your senses and move on
Like a sand dune in the desert
She can shape your life forever
Change you any way she pleases then be gone

A tornado in her passion
She’s the power of the wind
She’s a fragrance on your memory
You’re a captive to her whim
She’ll fill your sails and move you
She’s the storm that can undo you
And I’d sell my soul to breathe her in again

 

[up-fiddler]

I'm still liking the Talking Politically Correct Blues.

I think the imagery in this is great. The only change I would make would be to take out all of the 'shes' and 'womans' and substitute a specific name. Sing about one woman instead of all women. That would make it more powerful for me. When I read it there is a Hellen Reddy feel to the whole thing (I am woman, hear me roar...) but perhaps that is your intent. Anyway, great song and that's the end of my $.02.

 

[Hugo H]

And if you change it to be a specific name, there's your title.

 

[Folkie]

And if you change it to be a specific name, there's your title.

Originally it was a "Helen Reddy, I Am Woman..."--uplifting for "the Fairer Sex" in it's entirety. I was thinking "Man=Rock, Woman=Water: Woman wins." But I see your point (and thanks!) about making it for one woman (in this case my wife--no other safe choice), in first person, and it works that way too, like this:

Elena, she's like water
Like a river through a canyon
If given time she’ll turn a rock to sand
As she gently flows around me
I can’t hold her, I can’t stop her
She’s beyond the strength of any mortal man

She the wave upon the shoreline
She’s the power of the sea
She’s the force that’s irresistible
A Maelstrom swirling free
She’s a well that won’t run dry
She’s the rainfall from the sky
And a Godsend to a thirsty man like me

Elena, she's like air, now
She’s like soft and scented breezes
She lingers on my senses and moves on
Like a sand dune in the desert
She can shape my life forever
Change me any way she pleases then be gone

A tornado in her passion
She’s the power of the wind
She’s a fragrance on my memory
I'm a captive to her whim
She’ll fill my sails and move me
She’s the storm that can undo me
And I’d sell my soul to breathe her in again

 

[up-fiddler]

Great! It just seems more personal right across the board. Picking your wife's name was probably a wise way to go. Does she like the song?

 

[Folkie]

Great! It just seems more personal right across the board. Picking your wife's name was probably a wise way to go. Does she like the song?

In it's original she did. Haven't tried it out on her "personalized". My insurance is not high enough to worry that she'll kill me over it though.