Firstlight - cut some of the highs in the intro (hissing). As I continue to listen, it's still contains a lot of hiss when the ElecGuitar starts. I would probably just push that out with a final mix EQ. The tone on the guitar is excellent, Petrucci-ish. Not busy, fills in very well and creates a nice 'story' in the solo lines. I would've liked even a bigger ending (some sweeps?) and a little quiet fill in the last piano lines...
Good stuff! Impressive and inspirational. Well thought out!