Teacher
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Did I over think and fukk it up even more???
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TripleM
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I didn't hear the first version, so I can't make a comparison.
I thought the singer had a nice voice. Oh then the male voice comes in. Good voice there too.
That sparkly keyboard part that's prominent in the intro is a little "sharp" sounding. Not "sharp" as in off-key - it's got just a little sting to it. Something tells me you can make an EQ cut somewhere (if I had to guess, it'd be about 3Khz) to mellow that out just a bit.
I'm hearing some distortion on the left side off and on during the first 1:20 or so.
I'm on headphones, so this is a total guess. But I'm thinking you can get more out of that bass. This song really needs a powerful low end, and I don't think it's quite there.
Swell in volume at around 1:40-ish. The volume in the verse coming out of that section is seemingly louder than the volume of earlier verses.
Lyrically, I might suggest wordsmithing some of those lines. There's a bit of cramming lots of syllables into a fixed space. Some of the lines seem a little clumsy as a result. Strictly my opinion of course.
Focusing on too many negatives... The mix is better than what my comments might imply. There's a nice keyboard part underneath everything that seems to be working well.
My thoughts.
I thought the singer had a nice voice. Oh then the male voice comes in. Good voice there too.
That sparkly keyboard part that's prominent in the intro is a little "sharp" sounding. Not "sharp" as in off-key - it's got just a little sting to it. Something tells me you can make an EQ cut somewhere (if I had to guess, it'd be about 3Khz) to mellow that out just a bit.
I'm hearing some distortion on the left side off and on during the first 1:20 or so.
I'm on headphones, so this is a total guess. But I'm thinking you can get more out of that bass. This song really needs a powerful low end, and I don't think it's quite there.
Swell in volume at around 1:40-ish. The volume in the verse coming out of that section is seemingly louder than the volume of earlier verses.
Lyrically, I might suggest wordsmithing some of those lines. There's a bit of cramming lots of syllables into a fixed space. Some of the lines seem a little clumsy as a result. Strictly my opinion of course.
Focusing on too many negatives... The mix is better than what my comments might imply. There's a nice keyboard part underneath everything that seems to be working well.
My thoughts.
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DustyJack
New member
I listened to this one before, but can't remember if I replied to it.
Also I can't remember what I replied on.
Overall it's a good mix. Sounds comparable to the style that's out there.
The ONLY thing I had a problem with...and it's just a matter of my
preference...is the delay on the male rapper...He has a cool voice.
I'm not an engineer...yet...so I can't tell you how I'd fix...I just know what a prefer...maybe a little less noticeable delay on the
male.
Great words
DustyJack
Also I can't remember what I replied on.
Overall it's a good mix. Sounds comparable to the style that's out there.
The ONLY thing I had a problem with...and it's just a matter of my
preference...is the delay on the male rapper...He has a cool voice.
I'm not an engineer...yet...so I can't tell you how I'd fix...I just know what a prefer...maybe a little less noticeable delay on the
male.
Great words
DustyJack
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DustyJack
New member
Just listened again....It's not so much as delay as the effects on the male rapper. His Esses need to be de-s'd....They're right in there with the high hat.
Hope that clears it up
DustyJack
Hope that clears it up
DustyJack
Teacher
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there might be to little low end cuz everyone said the first one was distorting in the lows so i calmed them down...