Sincerely Yours

[Cheeky Monkey]

A song dedicated to all those fighting the war on terror -- and their loved ones waiting back home...

SINCERELY YOURS
© Tom Guertin, All Rights Reserved

(Verse 1)
Thought I’d share my love in a letter
Cheer you up, make you feel better
With the stroke of a pen I’m in your heart

Wish upon a four-leaf clover
My tour-of-duty will soon be over
End the lonely miles keepin’ us apart...
Sincerely yours

(Verse 2)
Think of you in the mornin’ sunrise
Dream of your magnetic blue eyes
A vision of beauty etched in my mind

Day and night my thoughts will wander
To the life I love to ponder
With you and the kids I left behind...
Sincerely yours...
Sincerely yours

(Bridge)
Can’t wait to get back home
My love, my love, my love (Backup singers only)
I'm weary of the combat zone
My love, my love, my love (Backup singers only)
Soon I’ll be callin’ on the phone
My love, my love, my love (Backup singers only)
To hear your voice whisperin’
Whisperin’ (Backup singers only)
To hear your voice tremblin’
Tremblin’ (Backup singers only)
When knowing that I’m finally...
On my way

(Verse 3)
I send all my hugs and kisses
To the woman I call my missus
Knowin’ that you love me I will survive

I seal this letter as the sunsets
Now a tear’s as close as it gets
To make me feel that I’m alive...
Sincerely yours...
Sincerely yours...
Sincerely yours...
Sincerely yours...

Sincerely yours

 

[mikeh]

I have no idea of your planned musical genre, but the lyrics would be great for a country song.

If I were you, I would get a good demo together, with a great vocal on it and try to get this published with a house that focuses on country music. Depending on how strong the music is, I would even consider joining something like Taxi to find a faster pipeline.

During the Gulf war, a local writer wrote some kinda "God bless the USA" song which ended up getting covered by a well known country artist.

I don't know all the details, since this guy is not a close friend - but what I do know is that he built a very nice Pro Tools studio (very "state of the art") with money from that song.

Sometimes "specialty songs" can hit at the right time, and this could be the right time for a song like yours. When opportunity knocks you need to be the 1st one at the door.

 

[David Katauskas]

Very nice lyrics. As mikeh suggested, put some music to it.

 

[Garry Sharp]

Good lyrics, line 3 of V1 is particularly good.

You can't "end" lonely miles. And miles can't be lonely. So those lines need a revisit.

The first 2 lines of verse 3 are horrible.

Also in V2 "ponder" is not a good word, see if you can change that.

All IMHO of course take what you want. Good start though

 

[Cheeky Monkey]

I have no idea of your planned musical genre, but the lyrics would be great for a country song.

If I were you, I would get a good demo together, with a great vocal on it and try to get this published with a house that focuses on country music. Depending on how strong the music is, I would even consider joining something like Taxi to find a faster pipeline.

During the Gulf war, a local writer wrote some kinda "God bless the USA" song which ended up getting covered by a well known country artist.

I don't know all the details, since this guy is not a close friend - but what I do know is that he built a very nice Pro Tools studio (very "state of the art") with money from that song.

Sometimes "specialty songs" can hit at the right time, and this could be the right time for a song like yours. When opportunity knocks you need to be the 1st one at the door.

Thanks for your feedback. I do have music for this, but haven't recorded it yet. Although my own style is based in rock (with folk/blues/country accents), this song is more in the folk rock style. Having said this, a country artist could certainly "countrify" it. I may just take your advice on promoting it. Thanks again.

 

[Cheeky Monkey]

Very nice lyrics. As mikeh suggested, put some music to it.

Thanks David. As I said to mikeh above, I have music for this one.

 

[Cheeky Monkey]

Good lyrics, line 3 of V1 is particularly good.

You can't "end" lonely miles. And miles can't be lonely. So those lines need a revisit.

The first 2 lines of verse 3 are horrible.

Also in V2 "ponder" is not a good word, see if you can change that.

All IMHO of course take what you want. Good start though

Thanks Garry. I will give your suggestions some thought. There's always room for improvement.