Should I re-track this to tape?

[jake-owa]

So I'm not trying to bore anyone, I just subscribed to Nowhere's unlimited space deal and now I feel obliged to use it.

This is an old (almost 5 years) song I redid from four track on the computer real quick-like. I was wondering more about the writing and style. Do you think the tune is worth re-tracking to tape or is it just silly? I can't tell anymore and I would much appreciate any feed back on the subject...or anything.

It's called Sleeping Dog.

BTW I know the guitar tones suck.

 

[Analytical Man]

I really like this alot

This really kicks some serious ass. I really like the sound of this, and the structure. Vocals are buried a little in some spots. The music reminds me of L.O.A. Your vocals are quite cool on this. I give this one a vote for being very solid...do whatever you can to meake it sound better. But it really sounds good to me. Guitars are maybe a little gritty. But this is good song writing, and the mix ain't bad at all.

 

[jake-owa]

Well thanks for the vote of confidence.

Here're the lyrics in case it's a bit hard to make out.

"Yes I forgive everything that happened, and not just because it's in the past
I'm moving on with the brightest outlook yet, I see my future and I know my time to shine is at hand
It's taken so long to finally understand
But now I know why I've chosen this direction, despite the pain despite the fear despite the loss despite rejection
I'm moving on in a straight line this time our lives have been too intertwined....but that's fine

(chorus)
Let it die, let it die, let it die...let the sleeping dog lie
let it die, just let it die

So now you call me up to tell me that you miss the good old days, I miss the moment but I'll never miss your cruel ways
That's not to say I'm perfect, no one could ever make that claim
I've made my own mistakes and I've been ashamed but I won't play your game

(chorus)
Let it die, let it die, let it die...let the sleeping dog lie
let it die, just let it die

Yes I believe anything could happen, that doesn't mean I want it to, so no I won't get back to you.
No I won't get back to you

(chorus)
Let it die, let it die, let it die...let the sleeping dog lie
let it die, just let it die"

Please vote...

Thanks, Jake

 

[Gidge]

Jake, directed here from the Songwriters forum....

I voted hell yeah...its a cool song...gotta get that vocal up........dont erase this though, if that vocal level is brought up, its very good as is.....


MIKE

 

[outlawtorn86]

really nice song, lyrics are great too, but theyre right, u should bring up the voc levels, cuz such great lyrics should be heard well... ;-)

 

[Doug H]

Cool song. Vocals need to come up, even as relaxed as they are sung. The drum and bass groove has a great sound going. I think it's worth playing around with.

Doug

 

[jake-owa]

Well I guess that settles it.

Retrack it is!

Thanks all!

 

[David]

I know you think the guitar tone sux but i didn't. I like this man, vocals have that "kool" laid back feel to them...have fun re-tracking!

 

[jacobar]

i like it.

I like the guitar tone. Drums seem to lean to the left a bit though(though that could me by cold...) agree with others, vocals need to come up a bit.

 

[A1A2]

I did a quik listen of your other tunes, I think your writing style has definitely progressed, and this tune doesn't excite me as much as others.

But, since you've already decided, I will shut up now

A Speaker is a cool tune tho


Al

 

[Toki987]

I think the saturation you got on the initial 4 track was great, else you may not have had the thick you got now. I like the tone of everything except the "cymbals" and not enough meat on the kick, snare was tad loud. They already said that vocal thingy. good groove.