Sharks In My Attic

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How bout a word or two of explanation? Is this you?-recorded by you? I listened/watched but not sure how to respond.
 
In the interest of minimalism, i'll just say the vocal did seem a bit prominent or full in the woodwind/string sections, to my ear, along with a bit of hiss. Not much room to add as far as any mix goes, not a lot there. A bit like a twisted kids song, i do find perceptual dissonance like that pretty funny, and i guess this is meant to be a comedic mood piece as opposed to some "big production showcase"? It works as that to me. I wasn't entirely sure how to respond either, or if you had invited any comments, so i just blundered in regardless. :o
 
Anders Erisian said:
In the interest of minimalism, i'll just say the vocal did seem a bit prominent or full in the woodwind/string sections, to my ear, along with a bit of hiss. Not much room to add as far as any mix goes, not a lot there. A bit like a twisted kids song, i do find perceptual dissonance like that pretty funny, and i guess this is meant to be a comedic mood piece as opposed to some "big production showcase"? It works as that to me. I wasn't entirely sure how to respond either, or if you had invited any comments, so i just blundered in regardless. :o
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thats pretty much what i was going for. it was going to be part of a concept album that i shelved.
 
Is that like bats in your belfry?

Aack that got creepy fast. If that's on purpose (and I'm betting it is)... genius. All you need is some offbeat static bursts and you've got an American Horror Anthem on your hands.

I get that it's part of a concept album... but then it was shelved..? So what is the plan for this lil radio-unfriendly masterpiece?


JJ.
 
Yeah, this is pretty good. Good sound on the vocal, and the vocal's well done too. I'm not sure what you're aiming for with the backing music, but I'd be trying to coax more clarity out of the part behind the first vocal segment - I like the sound of the carefree musical segment with orchestral instruments just because of that clarity. I suppose the muddiness of the synth is wonderful if that's what you're looking for, but like I said, I'd be looking for some way to give the synth more presence and definition. Dunno if that is at all helpful in any little way.
 
dobro said:
Yeah, this is pretty good. Good sound on the vocal, and the vocal's well done too. I'm not sure what you're aiming for with the backing music, but I'd be trying to coax more clarity out of the part behind the first vocal segment - I like the sound of the carefree musical segment with orchestral instruments just because of that clarity. I suppose the muddiness of the synth is wonderful if that's what you're looking for, but like I said, I'd be looking for some way to give the synth more presence and definition. Dunno if that is at all helpful in any little way.
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very helpful, thank you!
 
I found it a little annoying and disjointed at first, but it grew on me by the end. Which is pretty good for a <2 minute song.

That being said, my one critique with it is that the vox seem a little loud relative to the rest.
 
What's your intention with a piece like this? You say concept album. If so, one with a horror theme? Would it lead into another similar song?

It's nice and crisp ... and creepy. Good work!
 
I think the vocals need work. They are very stark and there is a big contrast between when she is singing and when she isn't. It's the background noise that changes between sections and it is quite noticeable.

Most rock songs, you want to leave in a little bit of pre-singing breath gasps and stuff. Feel the singer, he's in the room with you etc.. whatevers... For a song like yours, you want it more sterile. You should do some editing between each line to remove all the noise, breathing, lip smacks et al. It'll fit the feel f the song better.
 
Well yeah, the second tune you posted is great. I like your stuff. But your response to my first post was 'very helpful', but you've posted no changes to the mix, so how was it helpful? C'mon - you on the bus or off the bus?
 
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