
MessianicDreams
New member
hey guys (and girls!),
this is my latest song. i'd like to get some feedback on it - what d'you guys really think of this?? i tried to record 2 rythm guitars playin the same thing to creat a stereo effect....does it sound good?? i realise that the backin vocals are out of my range....but i'm a crap singer and couldn't sing a harmony line behind the chorus
does it sound so bad that i should take it out?
i can also hear this song beggin' for some more instruments...maybe some bangin' drums? an organ, or maybe a string arrangement?? i'd love for someone to add some stuff to it.
www.nowhereradio.com/messianicdreams/singles
"Run Away"
cheers,
MD
Lyrics "Run Away"
I see her everyday
she makes me feel this way
and when she walks by
it makes me feel like i could fly
Chorus
And she don't even know
how i feel
and when i see her holding hands
with some other guy
it makes me want to ask her....
...." baby run away with me"
And when her boyfriend he,
he treats her like shit
it makes me loose my mind
it makes me wish that i was blind
Chorus
and she dont even know how i feel
and when i see her arguin'
with some other guy
it makes me want to ask her....
...." baby run away with me"
Bridge
and when i close my eyes
she all that i see
and when i open up my eyes
she's every where i see
Chorus
and she dont even know how i feel
and when i see her cryin'
with some other guy
it makes me want to ask her....
...." baby run away with me"
and lookin back on this
i realise i miss
the way things used to be
the way she used to smile at me
this is my latest song. i'd like to get some feedback on it - what d'you guys really think of this?? i tried to record 2 rythm guitars playin the same thing to creat a stereo effect....does it sound good?? i realise that the backin vocals are out of my range....but i'm a crap singer and couldn't sing a harmony line behind the chorus

i can also hear this song beggin' for some more instruments...maybe some bangin' drums? an organ, or maybe a string arrangement?? i'd love for someone to add some stuff to it.
www.nowhereradio.com/messianicdreams/singles
"Run Away"
cheers,
MD
Lyrics "Run Away"
I see her everyday
she makes me feel this way
and when she walks by
it makes me feel like i could fly
Chorus
And she don't even know
how i feel
and when i see her holding hands
with some other guy
it makes me want to ask her....
...." baby run away with me"
And when her boyfriend he,
he treats her like shit
it makes me loose my mind
it makes me wish that i was blind
Chorus
and she dont even know how i feel
and when i see her arguin'
with some other guy
it makes me want to ask her....
...." baby run away with me"
Bridge
and when i close my eyes
she all that i see
and when i open up my eyes
she's every where i see
Chorus
and she dont even know how i feel
and when i see her cryin'
with some other guy
it makes me want to ask her....
...." baby run away with me"
and lookin back on this
i realise i miss
the way things used to be
the way she used to smile at me