Rock/Metal Work in Progress

[STAT1STICK]

I'm working on this piece and it's coming along pretty well. It's not finished yet but I have all the parts planned out and have written lyrics for it. I'm looking for some critique on the structure and guitar tone. I'm not too worried about the mix because it's just a rough cut. But if you think you hear something that shouldn't be there, let me know. And before you say anything... I know there is a little time hiccup a couple of times in the middle.

 

[TripleM]

I thought the intro was pretty cool with the siren and panning of the guitars. Real tight doubling on the guitars.

Didn't care for the guitar tone myself. Kind of boxy. The midrange didn't have the growl that I'd like on a song like this.

Drum samples, especially the snare and overheads could possibly be replaced with something a little better?

 

[dynis]

I like the siren sound as well, but didn't care as much for the panning in the intro. I always thought that type of panning was a little cheesy, but that's just my opinion. The guitar doubling is nice.

I agree with TripleM that the guitar tones could use more midrange to keep them from getting too dull. Personally I'd probably even turn the high end up a bit in the EQ, but that's just me; you can play around with it a bit since your mileage may vary.

Drums could definitely be better, but I'm not sure what gear you're working with or whether those are even close to what the real drums are intended to sound like.

Composition wise I think you're on the right track. My only suggestion would be to extend the change-up you have in the song right around that 1:42 mark. I like what you're doing there but I think you could make this more powerful by extending it into a breakdown, solo, or slower composition and then utilizing a drum fill (like you already did) to transition it back into the primary riff that's holding the song together. Basically I'm suggesting some sort of climax/crescendo to make the listener really feel the intensity.

Good luck with the song! Let us know how it goes!