remix of first song critique please.

[anth0]

give this a listen pls its a remix of a tune a few people liked i posted it last week and have just remixed it it was my first song.

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=428283

 

[Seeker of Rock]

Gotta work on the vocals. Intonation a bit, but delivery (recording) a lot. The writing style was "in your face", but there things that the song needs beyond that. Work some more, and that is in no way a bad thing, but you just need a little more work in what you are doing, IMHO.
KEEP AT IT!!!