Orignal - Love Has Lost Another One

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This is a song I originally recorded a couple of years back. Revisited and pretty much redid the whole song.



Looking forward to comments.
 
Sounds really Good man. I really like the small piano parts..its adds some flavor to it. I think its mixed well..vocals sit nicely. Really don't have much crits for it but a couple things I noticed from my ear(strictly my opinion)...

I think the snare(maybe the kick too) is a little too dry and too far back.

I also think there needs to be something added/changed to the chorus parts to let the listener know they are in the chorus. My first impression was that the song was one long verse until you changed it up a little during the bridge.
 
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Sounds really Good man. I really like the small piano parts..its adds some flavor to it. I think its mixed well..vocals sit nicely. Really don't have much crits for it but a couple things I noticed from my ear(strictly my opinion)...

I think the snare(maybe the kick too) is a little too dry and too far back.

I also think there needs to be something added/changed to the chorus parts to let the listener know they are in the chorus. My first impression was that the song was one long verse until you changed it up a little during the bridge.
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Thanks for the feedback.

I was thinking, add backing vocals to the chorus (which on the original I had), something like that or just instrumentation?

I pulled the snare back as it seemed to really cut through on my system, but will definitely take another look. Maybe the kick I did too much roll off. I always worry about boom at the expense of a good solid thump.
 
I can barely hear the kick, the snare could come up just a tiny bit. Agreed there's not much definition to distinguish the verses from the choruses. Maybe the strings? No strings during verse 1, bring them up (with a little more high end) in the first chorus, bring them way down for verse 2, then back up for chorus 2. I like what they do in verse 3. BU vocals in chorus 2 & 3 maybe?
 
Thanks Mike. That is actually a Moog plugin. I was waiting for a few more comments, but I agree there needs to be a chorus. The Moog I turned down as the swell in the sustained notes were pretty loud. But I will bring them up.

I like kick, just always careful when using it, so bringing it up not issue. I will check the snare, that might be the different patterns I use and the varied velocity. But will definitely revisit to see where I can bring it up.

Thanks for the inputs.
 
I was listening to this song again this morning on the way to work because it came up in Soundcloud. It's a catchy song and your vocals are perfect for it. If you could just figure a way to get some definition in the chorus you would have a stellar song for your collection. So many ways you could do it, but finding a way that YOU like may be a trick. Keep up the great work. If I could suggest one thing that may work...once that chorus starts, stop the quick strumming and maybe just one strum on each beat?
 
Bruthish said:
I was listening to this song again this morning on the way to work because it came up in Soundcloud. It's a catchy song and your vocals are perfect for it. If you could just figure a way to get some definition in the chorus you would have a stellar song for your collection. So many ways you could do it, but finding a way that YOU like may be a trick. Keep up the great work. If I could suggest one thing that may work...once that chorus starts, stop the quick strumming and maybe just one strum on each beat?
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I think you and Mike make a very good point, I have to pull that chorus out with better definition. Even when I was recording it, I was looking for ways to distinguish it.

I will remix/record and try some of the suggestions that you and Mike added. Might be just enough. I am trying subtle but distinct definition. I think those suggestion work towards that.

Thanks very much for the comments.
 
I like it. I like it a lot. There is a distinct lack of kick and the toms and crashes are too quiet as well. The snare might even come up just a touch. The bass is solid and moving, yet just sort of blends in. Don't know if that's the right way to describe it, but it's one of those bass lines that's there. It's necessary. But unless you concentrated on it, you just don't notice it. I like that! :)

AFA the chorus. Agree that maybe some harmony on at least the main line would distinguish it.
Keep up the great work!
 
Thanks BH. All of the things you mentioned, are noted and in the works on the remix.
 
Incorporating some of the advice. Some of this was already cooking. Kick and Snare increased, added chorus and made the Moog during the chorus a little louder.



Thanks to all for their comments.
 
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Is it just me? It sounds like the piano tone at the beginning got harsher...
Like the extra kick and snare. Very nice!
 
David! Beautiful man. Subtle is key and you did it. The little fills and harmonies made it just enough. GREAT job..really like this song
 
@BH - didn't touch piano track. These are harsh, it was the point of the piano. I hit the keys soft, then hit harder when the volume comes up. It is a velocity change. I don't touch the volume. On the kick and snare, I have to thank everyone for that suggestion, this is what makes the clinic so good.

Brut - thank you for your return and re-listen. Much appreciated.
 
I'm working from home because of a gas leak (plumber is here), so have the chance to listen to the rework.
Now I can hear the kick! Like the harmonies in the choruses, maybe just kick up the volume overall just a little in the choruses?
 
I thought the second mix was better. It seemed a little cleaner. The first mix had a lot of buildup in the 300hz-1200hz or so. Or at least it sounded like.

Couple of pitchy spots.

Sounds like a general lack of high end. Nothing horrible, but just a little lack of sparkle.

I think you could raise the level of the hard panned tracks (piano, guitar, etc.). The mix seems a bit too loud in the center and a bit too soft at the edges.

Little pop at 1:14.

I think you could get away with boost the low end to.
 
Thanks Mike, I was one the fence about the harmonies, wanted them back but not too far.

@TM - Yea, the pitchy spots. There is one where I am pushing my voice and it was like the 10th+ take and my voice wouldn't hold. I need to sing more to get my vocals a little stronger. That is my biggest problem, and I am not young.

Raise the sides, I like that idea, will review that. POP @ 1:14, will have to check. I will give the bottom a bit more boast, I have it EQ'd on a roll off at the 100 and at the top above 12K, so I area I can give back there to bring it up.

Thanks guys, much appreciated.
 
I tried to incorporate all of the suggestions, and I really think they made a difference. I will leave all three up for awhile in case others want to hear the differences. The suggestions were very subtle, but really made it that much better. My Thanks.



Unless there is something really wrong, this is most likely the final version. (I will see ;) )
 
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YOu brought up the strings more in the chorus, it seems, this works in helping defining the choruses. Good job overall.
 
Nice acoustic guitar tone. I'm not sure the vocal tone suits though. Good, good song!
 
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