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goodbyebluesky
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This is a recent song I've written.... I'm not very experienced with writing lyrics or even singing at all. My wife cried when I played it for her but I believe her she might be biased so..... I would like some opinions, please be polite. These chord voicings sound very nice on acoustic, for strumming and arpegiatting, so thats how I play it..... for now.
(*edit- posting it messed up the spacing of all my chord symbols, so oh well)
E5 D#m7 B5 Adim
|--0-----0-----0-----0----|
|--0-----0-----0-----0----|
|--9-----6-----4-----2----|
|--9-----6-----4-----2----|
|--7-----4-----2-----0----|
|--0----------------------|
E5
Pardon me while I catch my breath
D#m7 B5
and pause to reflect
E5
so that I'll chose words that I won't regret
D#m7 B5
E5
I'm holding out for nothing less
D#m7 B5
than for today and all the rest
E5
of my life spent with you
D#m7 B5
would you say yes?
(All chords arpegiatted- chord forms shown below)
E5
So would you be mine
D#m7 B5
and I'll be yours 'til the end of time
E5
Making you happy
D#m7 B5
Would make me sat-is-fied
E5 D#m7 B5
|---------0---------------------0------------------0----------|
|-------0---0-----------------0---0--------------0---0--------|
|-----9-------9-------------6-------6----------4-------4------|
|---9-----------9---------6-----------6------4-----------4----|
|-7---------------7-----4---------------4--2---------------2--|
|-------------------0-----------------------------------------|
The chorus seems somehwat cliche, but its actually the most melodic and pleasing part of the song to me. I just need another verse, and to lengthen the chorus a few lines, for when it comes around the second time.
Heres a bridge, or maybe outro part I thought would sound nice.
(let ring as much as possible)
|-------------------------------------------------12------|
|--------------------------------------------12--------12-|
|-------9-8-9--------9-8-9--------9-8-9------------------|
|-----9------------9------------9-------------------------|
|---7------------7------------7---------------------------|
|-0------------0------------0-----------------------------|
(*edit- posting it messed up the spacing of all my chord symbols, so oh well)
E5 D#m7 B5 Adim
|--0-----0-----0-----0----|
|--0-----0-----0-----0----|
|--9-----6-----4-----2----|
|--9-----6-----4-----2----|
|--7-----4-----2-----0----|
|--0----------------------|
E5
Pardon me while I catch my breath
D#m7 B5
and pause to reflect
E5
so that I'll chose words that I won't regret
D#m7 B5
E5
I'm holding out for nothing less
D#m7 B5
than for today and all the rest
E5
of my life spent with you
D#m7 B5
would you say yes?
(All chords arpegiatted- chord forms shown below)
E5
So would you be mine
D#m7 B5
and I'll be yours 'til the end of time
E5
Making you happy
D#m7 B5
Would make me sat-is-fied
E5 D#m7 B5
|---------0---------------------0------------------0----------|
|-------0---0-----------------0---0--------------0---0--------|
|-----9-------9-------------6-------6----------4-------4------|
|---9-----------9---------6-----------6------4-----------4----|
|-7---------------7-----4---------------4--2---------------2--|
|-------------------0-----------------------------------------|
The chorus seems somehwat cliche, but its actually the most melodic and pleasing part of the song to me. I just need another verse, and to lengthen the chorus a few lines, for when it comes around the second time.
Heres a bridge, or maybe outro part I thought would sound nice.
(let ring as much as possible)
|-------------------------------------------------12------|
|--------------------------------------------12--------12-|
|-------9-8-9--------9-8-9--------9-8-9------------------|
|-----9------------9------------9-------------------------|
|---7------------7------------7---------------------------|
|-0------------0------------0-----------------------------|
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