New Tune - Rough Mix - Feedback Requested Please

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Sounds great, Dave. I'm incredibly tired, so I can't give quite the detailed critique that I would like to, but all in all, the sound is pretty good.

For some reason, I found myself wondering why I thought it needed more spatiality... It seemed a bit 2-dimensional to me. The vocals seemed to be at 100% the whole time, and it got a bit wearing. Not sure what was up with the snare, but something didn't seem quite right. Seemed a bit over-processed..

I really liked the song. All of this may be my general state of being exhausted lately, but... Just seemed a bit like the production was trying too hard, when the music and performance could have done it better with a bit less.

I very well could have absolutely no idea what I'm talking about, so take with a grain of salt.

Stellar song, Dave.
 
Thanks, guys!

Brad, it's nice to have a song to post again, it's been awhile and I was starting to wonder if I was ever going to get one finished :eek: Thanks for the nice words about the guitar playing, but I just listened to the ripping guitar solo you played on your new tune "Black", so I'm not buying your comments about your own playing :)

Jason, thanks for the listen. This song has been challenging me since I started writing it, and I still haven't quite gotten to that moment that I usually get to with my tunes where I'm like "yeah, that's it, it's done". This one is just killing me. A few people on here have commented on some of the same things that have been bothering me about it, and you just hit one of them on the head - "The vocals seemed to be at 100% the whole time". I have been playing around with the idea of rerecording the very first chorus part where it drops to just guitar and vocals, and trying to sing that part differently, maybe with more sensitivity or something? A little quieter, maybe with more feeling...? I'm not sure, but I feel like that part needs to change to set off the rest of the song a little more. The problem is, it's relatively high up in my range, so I have a hard time holding back when I'm singing it. Dropping it down an octave is too low, and I like the melody, so I'm reluctant to change it. I'll have to play around with it I guess. Production-wise, you should have heard it a few weeks ago if you think it's got too much going on now :) I was having fun just recording all kinds of crap with no restraint. I ended up with 60+ tracks of stuff. It's way, way stripped down from what it was, but maybe I'm still adjusting to hearing it without some of that other stuff in there. Right now it still sounds sparse to me, but maybe it's still too much... Anyway, thanks for the comments, and get some rest!

Cheers guys! :drunk::drunk::drunk:

Dave
 
Lovely song, Dave!
You've got a great voice. Mix-wise, I really like the punch in the drums. Bass could use some more gain to make it more aggressive. Nice guitar tone but it could use a bit more body. Voice could use some ambience so it can sink a bit more into the mix. The harmonies at the end are beautiful. Nice listen!:)
 
joeym said:
..Voice could use some ambience so it can sink a bit more into the mix....
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That may be the ticket Dave! You know how many (me included) accuse you of having the vox too high or too in your face? We had this debate over your previous post months ago. I don't remember if we'd talked about adding some good reverb or not, but that may give you the breathing room you need. :D
Idk, it just stuck me when I read Joe's remarks and then reflected on what I had heard in your song.
:D:cool:
 
Hey Joey,

Thanks for the listen! I'm going to be working with my drummer again this week to re-record a few parts and add some fills, etc. After that's done, I'm going to mix it again, and I'll take a closer look at the bass and the vocals. I'm a big fan of the dry vocal sound (obviously, ha ha), so it's difficult for me to add reverb, etc :) What I usually do is add just enough tempo-synced verb and echo to my voice so that you can barely hear it when the track is soloed, and then it disappears in the context of the mix. I'll suck it up and bump it just a hair more in the next mix to see if that helps :D

Best Regards,

Dave DeWhitt
http://www.soundclick.com/davedewhitt
 
Hi All,

Sorry to bump this old post, but I have a new arrangement and mix of "Stranger in a Strange Land", and I'm hoping you might give it a listen again and provide more feedback. I did a few things to this one, not the least of which was cutting the arrangement so that the tune went from over 6 minutes down to 4:48. I'm thinking this arrangement and mix is very close to "finished", but just want to get some outside ears on it first.

Thanks, and happy turkey day to those who are celebrating!

www.soundclick.com/davedewhitt

Best Regards,

Dave DeWhitt
 
Hey Dave,
First off, I was checking out your new and improved "home studio" pics....really? You are gonna stick with the "home" label...uhhh...that looks like a studio to me! What did you do with the family brotha...tent in the backyard? :):)

The song is great - I can't get too detailed on the differences, cuz it's been awhile since the first listen. But the things that stand out to me are:
The opening guitar sounds used to bug me just a little (although I didn't mention it before) I don't even know if you changed it, but I'm buyin' it now, so that's good. Your voice seems, idk.....not so.....'all up in my grill' :confused: I like it better, but, again, I don't know what you changed if anything.
Gotta go...I've got to go lobby the wife to cancel the holidays; no toys for the kids :eek:, cuz daddy needs a studio upgrade. Gotta keep up with the Jone's or (Dewitt's)! :D

Happy Thanksgiving to you and your family.
 
Ha ha...yeah, I've been gradually reclaiming the finished basement back from the kids for the past couple of years. A couple of feet here, a couple of feet there. They haven't really noticed yet, so I think my evil plan is working :D

Thanks for listening. I'm liking this version a lot more than the last. If nothing else, I think the arrangement is much better - it's shorter and it builds better.

Have a great holiday!

Dave
 
Great song and mix!! Vox are KILLER!
Love the feel!
CRUD!!!! The whole song is KILLER!!!!
No critque here!!:cool:

DANG!!!!!! This ROCKS!!!
 
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