New song "The Noise" feedback appreciated!

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the first thing that jumped out at me was during the verse the snare drum sample you are using is very mechanical and doesn't sit well in the mix, I would change that out for a better sample or change the velocities if possible.

also, during the verse, the bass feels very distant and lost in the mix, the kick is prominent, but seems it is stepping on the bass frequency wise.

the vocals a bit unclear, I feel you could boost a little bit of the air and clarity on the vocals during the verse to make it stand out a little more, as well as take out some of the "cloudiness" around the midrange area.

also, to much reverb. this is a common mistake a lot of people make, what I would do is find out where everything sounds good to you, then back all the effects off by half, step away from it for a day, and come back and listen to it. People tend to overdo effects, and the "cutting everything in half" method seems to work well to make everything really sit in a mix right.

on the song itself, and this is just my personal opinion, the chorus doesn't fit at all with the verse. this could be the vibe you are going for, but i would look for a way to transition those smoother if anything so it's not like 2 different songs wrapped up in one.
 
Yeh I really like this. I'm not sure I can give so much feedback on the sound. Just the song structure and singing really. I like the bits where you sing the best. I almost see the

The bell
The bull
The line
The walk, etc...

as belonging in the background of some more singing. They don't much for me on their own but I think they are a cool idea. I'd personally try a little melodic singing over those words. After the first lot of those, it goes from a really sweet bit of singing back to a quite robotic sounding voice. I can see the point of that idea in relation to the song and the lyrics, but I think the refrain kind of distances itself by the sound of it. I just think a bit of something melody wise in here would blend the two ideas together. If that makes sense? Feel free to ignore. :D

But it sounds good to me. I like the melody and the twangy guitar. It's short, but sweet. :)
 
It's an interesting song. I mean that in a good way.

Little pop at :49. Might be a vocal artifact, so it could be removable.

Kick sounds like a rubber ball. Not my preference.

Guitar sounds decent.
 
Great, thanks Jnke and Frits and TripleM. Very helpful. I think I agree with every one of the points both of you made. This forum is so helpful because I didn't hear those things before. I did humanize the snare but I agree it doesn't quite match. I really need to learn how to manipulate EQ, I think that's the next big thing I need to tackle.

I know what you're saying about the chorus part not really fitting, and being jarring next to the melodic verse. But I don't want to lose it, so I am going to really think about what you said Frits, that could be a nice way to tie it together.

I'll try backing off on the reverb but it will be hard for me.

That is supposed to be a "stomp" and a clap in the chorus! I'm not really happy with the stomp either. Maybe start over with a different sample or something.
 
I'm not going to comment on the mix ... because there's too much to comment on in context of, "You've a bit to still learn.", Jess. What I can offer ... because you want to keep the chorus relatively intact ... is a writing/producer thought that piggybacks g_j's thought regarding the chorus.

Perhaps you'd consider having a melodic background/bed during the chorus while the lyrics get layered on top the way you do it now? As it is now, all the "music" halts at chorus change ... and I know that you're making a statement ... but you might be able to add a little texture to the presentation there that way.

I very much like your use of sonic blends ... spoken word and sound clips ... I'm a fan of that approach myself.
 
This is one of those songs that sound good enough as is to communicate. And what I heard was,

I wake
I live
I sleep
I dream

YMMV.
 
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