New Song - First Mix - Feedback Requested

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Very good, David!

I think the bass could use some more boom in the bottom.

Did you bump ambience on the kit on the choruses? Sounds like it. Nice effect.

Voice , kit, and solos are leveled together. Bass and guitar chord comping get lost later on, I think. If you were to add instrumentation, I'd suggest an acoustic 'grand piano' blocking chords and sustaining, simple figures to knit together the chop.

There's a section at 1:49...like a bridge you dive into. I wuz thinkin' it'd be great to cut time there by half, and work your way back to 'up' ....but prolly too late.

Nice vocal! Nice sounds. Especially the kit and vox. I'm digging Pauls time, feel and restraint. One nit...can't hear a lot of snare on the snare drum. Top mic only?? A little 'tub' and 'wash' would sound a bit better to me.

Haven't heard you for a while. This is a new direction, yes?
 
Very nice, sounds like there is some talent in this place. My only nit would be the bass lacking a little bottom end, not much though. Vocals were great, good set of pipes there. Nice job.
 
Cool, thanks guys...great feedback already. So, I just uploaded a new version with a couple of minor changes - pulled the low cut freq on the bass EQ down a little lower and boosted 200 Hz just a tad. I also added the snare hit at the beginning to start the whole thing off.

Jeff, nice to hear from you. You've posted some really cool stuff lately. I've been busy and I've uploaded a bunch of new stuff to my soundclick page lately, but yeah, this one is a little bit of a new direction. I'm hoping it still fits in with the others enough to still be in the same body of work without having it stick out like a sore thumb...lol.

Thanks for listening!

Dave
SoundClick artist: Dave DeWhitt - page with MP3 music downloads
 
At first I thought it was that Vampire Weekend song. Ha

Sounds real good. Love the guitar sounds. Good harmonies. Drums sound great.

Bass is just a bit boomy for me. Like it has a little peak somewhere around 100 - 120hz.

Not much else from me. Good job.
 
In the verse, I found the bass guitar a little loud. The chorus had a nice balance with more going on. I'd suggest more l/r guitars to fill it in all the time and center the lead. This is a really great song, I just didn't care for the mix in the verse or the solo.
 
Hey ido1957, thanks for the comments. I was really wondering about pushing those leads off to the right side a little - whether that was a cardinal sin. It seems like leads usually sit in the center, but I figured, what the heck, I'll give it a try. I was thinking it might balance out in the mix, since the "chinkachinka" guitar part is a little to the left. I'll have to figure out if I can do anything with panning in the verses to improve it, and I'll check the bass levels in the verses too.

Thanks!

Dave
SoundClick artist: Dave DeWhitt - page with MP3 music downloads
 
Another wonderful contribution from you, Dave!
Your songs have such great hooklines and that's the most important thing in songwriting.
And paired with your usual great performance, they're killer! Mix sounds fine to me, everything nicely balanced and clear. Great stuff!:)
 
Listening on cans right now, so I can't really make great judgements, but I think song would sound pretty cool with that Nirvana effect on the drums. Most of their "In Utero" stuff has it. It kind of sounds like a slap back delay. Sounds great!
 
Great song, great energy, the way the chorus takes off, the pulsing bass, great singing. The only thing I might say is maybe the vocal could use something, maybe a little more ambience or effect or compression or something. Also, the little break where everything stops caught my ear, and the abrupt ending. But those are really minor things, sounds great.
 
Sounds pretty good to me. I think the bass is a little boomy. Not too loud, just too much klow-end energy. Tighten it up but keep it at the same relative loudness level. Vocals get a little buried in the choruses. Other than that, pretty dang good.
 
Yeah, this mix sounds really good. I don't hear any issues at all really. It is pretty simple as you say, but catchy in a way that is reminiscent of more commercially produced stuff. I found the vocals to be a bit dry, but it certainly works in terms of clarity as it is. The abrupt ending didn't entirely work for me, but so what. A fine recording indeed.
 
I too think the bass is just a tad too much. I'm also wondering if the vox should brought up a bit. But maybe not if you will be tweaking the bass.

Another great song from you. Really enjoy your stuff!!!
 
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Nice work Dave - love that syncopated guitar line throughout and you've got an excellent voice.
 
Just listened to the remix. Again, great tune.

If I could offer suggestions that I think would make it better:

There's a line, in places, playing opposite the lead guitar...a nice scale-wise thing...simple. Doubling the line with something opposite would be nice...a little organized strength. A little counterpoint to play nice with the only melody in the song...the vox

The chorus has a dead spot between couplets. I keep wishing there was melodic instrumental punctuation there to add a little more interest. The background vox take up the spot at the end.

There's a envelope effect or something on the solo guitar? I ends up sounding like a cheap plug-in modeler, or just a real bad transistor amp. It's quite an unpleasant 'voice'. Can you re-amp from a dry track.... which I'm sure you made? :^)

Love the drums. But what I thought was a bump in the ambience on the choruses is gone? Mebbe I heard wrong the first time. It was used on Levigne's "Who Knew" to great effect. Added to the push in the chorus.

I thought the bass was nice. Listening on phones, though.

Really nice tune.
 
Dave - you got vocals. Very "Don Henley"-ish... Great control, punch, and texture. Love it. Listening through earbuds, so can't be overly critical, but... One thing arrangement-wise that I couldn't help but think, is getting rid of the off-beat guitar riff entirely during the choruses. It's pretty covered up anyway, and I think it'd give the song a bit of diversity. Definitely keep it during the verses. 2nd Verse would be cool, if you added an additional single strum with long decay, or some pads or something to add some diversity to the 2nd verse, that'd be awesome... Or some "oohs" or "ahhs" held long (very legato, to off-set the staccato rhythm of the guitar)... Hope that made sense.

All in all, I really enjoyed it a lot, man. Good on ya for keepin' the creativity alive. Lemme know when you've got an album available.
 
I rather like the guitar continuing through the chorus - it's almost buried but there & holding on.
Cool song - almost power pop!
Oh, is there a build up in the mid freqs? It sounds like it could be a little cripser.
 
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