New Original Song: I Won't Let You Go by Reve + Ujn

[Ujn Hunter]

Our latest track. Love to hear your thoughts. Written and recorded in Reaper between 12/1/2023 and 12/8/2023. I used ToneX for my guitar track.

 

[DM60]

The vocal doesn't seem to have enough separation. It isn't loudness, but is isn't given any space. I think everything works but the vox needs a bit more space.

I think it needs just a bit more air, not to take away the foreboding vibe, but just some breathing room. IMO

Good tune for sure, that "Wall" sound comes through.

 

[PorterhouseMusic]

I like it. Nice work!

 

[JAPOV]

I'm afraid to ask for the lyrics...

Lol... Yeah', The lead VOX needs more presence so you can turn up the backing vox.

Beyond that, if you were shooting for a vampire funeral dirge vibe... YOU NAILED IT!

 

[Ujn Hunter]

I Won't Let You Go
Reve + Ujn

I woke amongst
The crystal fields
In prism caves
Where no one's real
And everyone is dying
It's a dream,
So serene.

Our beating hearts
Imbue disorder
Wrapped in gauze
Of grenadine
Til the long sleep brings us respite
Finally...
Finally.

(Inst)

As crimson seeps into the dirt
It's you and me and barren earth
Just limestone, us... (and) the vacuous embrace
Of space

And still I will not let you go
Into your makeshift grave
I'll hold you in the fields
We'll rot away
Together,
We will

Stay the hour with final breaths
And float apart into our deaths
As all the dust of bodies
Blows away

Our lives wink out
The screaming stops
The bargain we've betrayed
Divine, the retribution
All is paid
All is paid

 

[dobro]

The vocal doesn't seem to have enough separation. It isn't loudness, but is isn't given any space. I think everything works but the vox needs a bit more space.

Sometimes I think it's just a matter of making the vocal louder during its quietest moments.