NEW ORIGINAL - Need Honest Opinions

[fat_fleet]

Okay, this is a guitar instrumental.. In C#, just for context.


Deh deh duh
De de de de duh
Duuh duh duhhh de-DUUUUUHHHHHHHHH!

Dip dip dit dit duh
Duh-du-duh duhduh duh
Deh neh neh neh neh
Duh deneh-du-DUUUUUHHHHHHHHHH!

Bridge:
Deh neh neh ne
Neh neh neh ne
Deneh ne ne bapadah POWWWWW!!!

Deh neh
Deh neh
Deh neh neh neh
Deh de deh de DUUUUUUUUUUUUUUHH!

Deh neh neh
Deh neh neh neh
Det det dep dep dowanowaPOWWWWWA!!!!!
Dip deh deh neh neh

Deh neh neh neh neh neh
Deh neh neh neh neh neh
Deh neh neh neh neh neh
Deh neh neh neh neh neh
Deh neh neh neh neh neh
Deh neh neh neh neh neh
Deh neh neh neh neh neh
Deh neh neh neh neh neh
Deh neh neh neh neh neh
Deh neh neh neh neh neh (I know this part's kind of repetitive.. I'm going for a trancey effect)

Final Chorus:
Dip dip dit dit duh
Duh-du-duh duhduh duh
Deh neh neh neh neh
Duh deneh-du-DUUUUUHHHHHHHHHH!
Dip dip dit dit duh
Duh-du-duh duhduh duh
Deh neh neh neh neh
Duh deneh-du-DUUUUUHHHHHHHHHH! (and fade....)

 

[Greg_L]

I think it's perfect because any other response would be mean!

 

[fat_fleet]

Don't hold back man.

 

[fat_fleet]

It's getting like a Grammy or something.

 

[Chili]

This is the first instrumental I got all the way through. But still, it's weak without lyrics.

 

[fat_fleet]

Spit some rhymes over it, we'll get sumpin goin!

 

[Chili]

Don't put me on the spot, Fat
you know I'm hot
I've got the words and the birds and fingers write the jot.
gonna gimme a breakdown shake down take donw on the playground
cause I ain't got no shoelaces by the way, son.
What you got for me? get on yo knees and crap one out
gimme momma a shout cause yo give her doubt
about the loud musical instrumental goin mental
should be shot
Don't put me on the spot, Fat
you know I'm hot
I've got the words and the birds and fingers write the jot.

 

[Greg_L]

Spit some rhymes over it, we'll get sumpin goin!

You should collab with that veterinarian from arkansas. He's got his finger on the pulse of a new form of rap.

 

[fat_fleet]

I hone$ly th!nk Ch!l!'$ approach !$ fre$ha

 

[Chili]

I avoided bad words.

 

[fat_fleet]

Seriously Chili-dawgg, u grow up in da hood or somethin?

 

[Chili]

The burbs of NYC. And Boston.
Seriously.

 

[fat_fleet]

Oh I can definitely tell.

 

[Atkron205]

You should collab with that veterinarian from arkansas. He's got his finger on the pulse of a new form of rap.

thats funny right there.

 

[Track Rat]

Hmmmmmm..........................not sure about the fade............

 

[andrushkiwt]

You should collab with that veterinarian from arkansas. He's got his finger on the pulse of a new form of rap.

I'm almost certain he meant "army vet", but this is funnier. go with this.

 

[andrushkiwt]

I liked the bridge the best - rest was ok. nothing i haven't heard before though.

 

[fat_fleet]

I liked the bridge the best - rest was ok. nothing i haven't heard before though.

Eh, songwriters place too much importance on "originality" (as if that's even possible). Just holds 'em back.

 

[Illsidgus]

Not bad, but I think in the Bridge you should have gone to an Am13dim11. I mean good god man why would you go with just an Am13?