Need to improve but have no idea how to?D:

[1stComesFiction]

Is this even remotely good? need advice or tips.
Well I can not link my work to here but if someone want to take the time my question was on soundcloud my name is FirstComesFiction and the song is called It's You

 

[DarrenVocal]

It sounds like you're trying to force the voice out and are not being natural. How to be natural? Sing the tone you want, do not be shy and make a lower tone than what you wanted instead. Lots of improve to do! Other than that: It sounds pretty much bad. Its the truth.

 

[ido1957]

Post ten garbage posts so you can post a link. That's what you should do first.

I listened to your song and you sound like you're making up the melody as you go along. The melody isn't matching the guitar chords. Figure out the melody first before you decide what chords to play.