need some help.......

[turbojs]

This is technically my first song, I dont have the lyrics recorded as of yet because I wanted some advice as to if this song totally blows recording wise. If yall will give me your thoughts as to what is wrong and what right would help alot.

I made this in approx 2 days.

http://www.nowhereradio.com/turbojs/singles


Ohh also my intent (or what I see in my head anyway) was to be creepy crawly, but around 2 min mark I change it up some and then at the end I used some differnt drum patterns so hang in there till the end if you can heh.

 

[TexRoadkill]

Song wise it's got a cool groove to it. Recording wise it's not a bad first effort at all. It has some of the usual issues like it's a bit thin sounding but keep at it.

 

[turbojs]

cool ok ........

so thin? from reading around on here does that mean it doenst have enough volume or do you mean i should maybe double up on the guitar?

thanks for the compliment by the way, but I guess thin tells me it sounds weak or uninspired......but not sure if that is what you meant.