My first track

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Hi,

This is my first attempt at a full track, having put my studio together a month or so ago. It's been a massive learning curve. I had the lyrics posted in that part of the forum and rayC, suggested I post the track here to get some more advice/feedback. It's not overly complex as I didn't want to get ahead of myself and become bogged down and lose the enthusiasm.

Many thanks for reading and listening.

regards

Tim


 
Very nice, thanks for posting.
Your guitar is out of tune and you could use some work on that solo, but otherwise, seemingly transparent mix.
 
great start.

the drum loop is pretty obvious and kinda doesn't fit too well with the production of the rest of the song, but whatever.

piano sounds fine to me. strings are pretty hard to hear most of the time a bit more distracting than adding.

vocals are a little too dry, some reverb and compression could help them sit better then you can bring them back in the mix a little bit.

guitar at the end is too up front, again some reverb could help that.

not bad for a first try!
 
Wow, this is a really nice, clear mix. Impressive, considering your noobness, well done sir! Agree with the comments above, don't have much else to add myself.
 
Very nice, thanks for posting.
Your guitar is out of tune and you could use some work on that solo, but otherwise, seemingly transparent mix.

Thanks Telegram Sam, much appreciated. I think the issues with the guitar are probably down to me having not picked up an electric in a serious way for a few years and wringing its neck lol, so I'm probably bending the string with my over enthusiasm, I'll re do the guitar once I get fully back up to speed and have a better technique in hand.

aaronmcoleman, thanks for taking time to listen and reply. This being my first go at recording a whole song, I started out very simple and now realize that my subsequent learning and improvement with the equipment meant that the song and production out grew the humble beginnings, which happened to the drum track. I will totally re hit this song at a later time when I have a few pieces under my belt and get more of a feel my own arranging and general sound. Thanks you very much.

jonny deep, thank you for your thoughts. It's very encouraging to read some positive comments. I am very happy to take the criticism and learn and have to say that my experiences on this site have been a great balance of complimentary feedback along side the pointing out of the areas which can be done better.
Thank you.

all the best and thanks

Tim
 
Good to hear it agin Phrasemaker.
The lyrics and melody are quite strong & would work with almost any backing.
I look forward to developments.
 
Cool song dawg, but needs some work as well. Like better drums, better vocal performance and a little more variegation to keep things interesting. It doesn't sound bad, but doesn't blow me away either. Good start , don't stop :D
 
Thanks rayC, yes I think a complete re work is on the cards for this song. I'm working on another track at the moment, just to give me a bit more perspective having spent a few hours getting to grips with all the knobs and a few techniques while getting this first track up and running. I'll be back on this one shortly and hopefully will be able to improve most aspects of the track. Thanks for the feedback, much appreciated.

FoulPhil, Thank you for the feedback, I agree with your observations. Having only just put my studio together and had a few years break from playing instruments with any serious intention, I aimed low with the arrangement and production in the hope I could at least get it somewhere near right albeit perhaps not particularly impressive by way of the arrangement. To be honest it sounded good to me when I first put it together, but I guess the excitement of actually hearing a song I wrote and sung, recorded coming out of the monitors seemed like a bit of an achievement. Since then I've worked on improving my playing and learning to be a bit more expressive vocally, although I never really intended to sing lol. I have a reasonable knowledge of music theory, heaps of enthusiasm and I'm inspired to be creative, so hopefully the execution will catch up to within a smaller distance of the intention lol with a little more work. I will completely overhaul this track in the very near future and post again, hopefully I'll show some improvement. I certainly won't stop as I am completely hooked now I've started and find there are not enough hours in the day to get as much done as I'd like. Thank you.

all the best

Tim
 
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