Moody Tune To Check Out...

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I've got another tune for your critiquing pleasure. This ones kind of a slow one with a heavy beat.

Acoustic Guitars, Bass, Voice and Drums.

URL: http://bob.birdsallinteractive.com/
SONG: No_Reply.mp3

Let me know what you think...
 
decent tune you have there - but you have to work a lot at your voice man! I also think it'worth of it cos it's a nice voice but bad technique..

cheers
 
huh...?

I didn't think my voice was any worse than any other song I've done. Maybe I just suck or something...maybe I'm deaf. It sounds fine to me. It's supposed to be kind of heart-felt and emotional. I'm not trying to sound like a Backstreet Boy.

Anyone else think I need a lot of work on my voice?
 
any other advice here? I think I need a new mix to change it up and make it a bit more "ghostly" maybe more reverb on the voice...more dramatic guitar echos...
 
The mix is kinda muddy........the kick drum doesn't cut thru and the snare could come up some.....the acoustic sounds pretty good.....I think the muddiness might be an excess of energy somewhere in the region of 500hz.....might want to pull it down in that area......decent song.....fairly nice guitar playing......I don't think your voice is too bad.....I do hear some pitch issues here and there but that's only cured by singing lots.....you do have a fairly good tone to your voice and that's a big plus to have that from the start......I think some of your emotionality that you're trying to impart to your voice is perhaps a little bit overdone. I'm not saying it's bad and I think you should keep the idea of using that but it sounds a little melodramatic sometimes.
Fairly nice pice of work.....I'll watch for more.
 
Robertt8 said:
Anyone else think I need a lot of work on my voice?
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Well, since you're asking: in my ears it sounds like you're trying a bit too hard. Relax a little, sing with your body (instead of your head, hope you understand what I mean ;) ) and it'll sound better I assure you. At least in my opinion. On the other hand: ever heard of Joe Jackson? Sings exactly like you, and he got (and still is) very popular so...

Before you jump on me: I've got an extremely nasal voice myself so I kinda know what I'm talking about. I'm currently in the process of 'denasalizing' my voice, in other words: by learning how to sing with my body and mouth. A long process... :D

No matter at what stage of experience you are, everything always needs work! :)

Song sounds very nice btw...
 
Plus:

VERY GOOD VOICE.


Minus- the mic or eq sounds hollow, and the room you put the voice in makes it even more hollow.


Plus: You Know the rules. You followed the rules. The rules reward you with a wildcard.

minus: That hollowness just ruins a great voice.


Definitely a B+. Its te kind of song that I can just listen to over and over, the kind of song that can make it on MTV with the right push.
 
LT BOB: Thanks for the feedback. I'll try that 500hz idea. Strangely enough, I really didn't think i was trying too hard to sound melodramatic. I guess it just came out that way.

PEDULIST: I've never heard of Joe Jackson, do you mean Jack Johnson? I get that one every once and a while. Thanks for the comments.

CYANJAGUAR: Thanks again for the feed back and kind words (mostly). What would you suggest doing to make the eq better on the voice? Any help would be greatly appreciated.

Thanks guys...
 
I like it.
I can hear the Joe Jackson but I was thinking more Elvis Costello. Wonder what this would sound like with a quicker tempo.
 
considering that I have listened to this song like ten times I am giving it an

A-

Very catchy.

I dont really care about the hollow voice. When you listen to a wildcard song, nothing else matters except the wildcard.

This is definitely a wildcard.

If its the eq though, it might need either less air, or more woodyness in the 400 hz area.

This is an incredibly good song.
 
very nice, i like the wandering leads and the sound of the rhythm guit and I think your voice sounds fine. Good job.
 
hey,

i know what you mean by the jack johnson comparison, maybe the main difference is the smoothness of his voice. ( i saw him live in concert the other night - he was amazing by the way)

but possibly that raw-edged 'meaningful' voice is what you're going for.

If so, GREAT!!

Maybe some toms / bongos instead of those 'drums', would give a nice feel.........maybe

well done

y
 
Robertt8 said:

PEDULIST: I've never heard of Joe Jackson, do you mean Jack Johnson? I get that one every once and a while. Thanks for the comments.
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*sigh*, I'm getting old...:( :)
 
Decent song I thought. Some good music. I thought the voice sounded very good. A little "over expressiveness" in spots. The guitar sounded real good. Interesting part too.

The backing vocals are tough to hear. The get covered by the lead vox.

The drum part was a little weird during the chorus. The snare would hit big then dissappear for a time.

Heard some pops at :20-:22, 2:15. Little vocal bobble at about 1:20.

Good sound.
 
Pedullist said:
*sigh*, I'm getting old...:( :)
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:D :D ...that damn old age is a bitch, aint it?

I hear the joe jackson too. Nice tune man. Im hearing some pichiness that you might want to give another listen to. I like the acoustics alot in this. Nice tune.
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JMAN: Thanks. Okay...I guess I have heard of Joe Jackson...not too familiar with his stuff. He did that semi-popular tune "Stepin' Out" didn't he? I was never to crazy about that one...anyhoo...and I've got to say it the first time I've gotten a comparison to Elvis Costello. It's an interesting concept to speed this one up. I might try it and see how it sounds...thanks!

CYANJAGUAR: Well I'm glad you seem to be warming up to the tune. Thanks for the upgrade! Just out of curiosity, what do you mean about the "wildcard"? Is this one slipping through as something different than a typical tune? And I'll definitely screw with the EQ on the voice a bit. Thanks for the kind words!

KHOMPEWTUR: I'm glad you like the tune! My leads are pretty much always wandering, every take I do is usually completely different than another when it comes to the recording of them...I guess the quicker tunes are a little more structured. Thanks!

YIORDANAKI: I'm a big fan of Jack Johnson as well. I wouldn't necessarily say this was one that has that sound, but there are a couple on that link...I've gotten it with the tunes "So_Cold.mp3" and "Get_Home.mp3". This tune I was trying to be a bit more emotional which (I thought anyway) required a different singing style, but it sounds like I might have over done it. I think I'm glad you guys didn't hear my original "off the cuff" version when I wrote it. You guys would have probably crucified me. I actually have bongos on just about all my tunes. This one it just didn't seem to work for me. Thanks!

PEDULIST: Don't worry, we're all getting old together.

TRIPLEM: Thanks for the feedback...I actually wanted those background vocals to be more subtle than anything. I could turn 'em up a bit and see how it sounds. And ya, I know. I was trying to make the drums in the chorus kind of unique. I was waiting for a comment on those. Thanks for helping out.

GUERNICA: I'm really going to have to check out this Joe Jackson better. It'd be interesting to hear the comparisons. Thanks!


I think I'm gonna take another shot at this mix and possibly another shot at guitar and maybe re-sing it. I'm always open to advice. Thanks for the help people!
 
like it...

the voice is fine but possibly just a bit too much concentration on the mood of the voice and not the notes coming out. I think the mix is ok but a few of the levels could stand some adjusting:

Kick and snare seem a bit absent...
the background vox are subtle, but almost too...
like the guitar...

from my no-engineer perspective, it is a good solid song that has potential if you are truly going to work at it more to get the sound quality maximized...

-Humble-
 
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