Lyrics...it's a start...

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ADD -- blessing and curse
These would go somewhere in a yet-to-be-written song...

I can't play for you when I lie in that field of stone
So this guitar belongs to you now, remember you're never alone
Put it on your knee, son, and play a joyful song of memory
And keep in your heart the memories of me.

What's everyone think?
 
I liked it, namely the first line. I think its good.

Any story to it? Or just a spontaneous thought?
 
I like it. Same sorta idea to this verse from John Denver. This is always thought of a sorta silly song, but I like the lyrics. Anyway, my point is, it's a cool concept, and I think you should run with it.

Well, my fiddle was my daddys till the day he died
And he took me by the hand and held me close to his side
Said, live a good life and play my fiddle with pride
And thank God youre a country boy

My daddy taught me young how to hunt and how to whittle
Taught me how to work and play a tune on the fiddle
Taught me how to love and how to give just a little
Thank God Im a country boy

Rest of lyrics here

P.S. I hope this didn't spoil it for you. One of the worst things is when you write something cool and someone say "Heh, that sounds just like ______" I thinnk your's is darker, and more heartfelt, and definately different enough. I just always like to take the opportunity to mention John Denver, if there's even a smidgen of loose connection. So keep working on it!!
 
andyhix said:
I like it. Same sorta idea to this verse from John Denver. This is always thought of a sorta silly song, but I like the lyrics. Anyway, my point is, it's a cool concept, and I think you should run with it.

Well, my fiddle was my daddys till the day he died
And he took me by the hand and held me close to his side
Said, live a good life and play my fiddle with pride
And thank God youre a country boy

My daddy taught me young how to hunt and how to whittle
Taught me how to work and play a tune on the fiddle
Taught me how to love and how to give just a little
Thank God Im a country boy

Rest of lyrics here

P.S. I hope this didn't spoil it for you. One of the worst things is when you write something cool and someone say "Heh, that sounds just like ______" I thinnk your's is darker, and more heartfelt, and definately different enough. I just always like to take the opportunity to mention John Denver, if there's even a smidgen of loose connection. So keep working on it!!
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I'm not sure which direction it's going to take yet. It might be dark, but it might not be. It's definitely heartfelt. I just have to finish it...

I have so many unfinished songs...
 
mjr said:
I have so many unfinished songs...
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Hahah, don't we all? I think i just get bored of one song after a while, so unless i'm constantly adding new spurs and exciting elements, its going to get boring first. That's why im into recording, because i can add (real) drums, bass, mandolins, percussion, etc... and really get an idea of how it will sound. I'm sick of midi lol.
 
mjr said:
These would go somewhere in a yet-to-be-written song...

I can't play for you when I lie in that field of stone
So this guitar belongs to you now, remember you're never alone
Put it on your knee, son, and play a joyful song of memory
And keep in your heart the memories of me.

What's everyone think?
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My initial and repeated reaction is that the lyrics are emotional. Anyone who has lost a parent (feels like a father here) will identify quickly. They may even be unable to sing along because they are choked up. Yes - they are good..... Keep working on it - great start.....

:D :) :D :)
 
ido1957 said:
My initial and repeated reaction is that the lyrics are emotional. Anyone who has lost a parent (feels like a father here) will identify quickly. They may even be unable to sing along because they are choked up. Yes - they are good..... Keep working on it - great start.....

:D :) :D :)
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Thanks!

I'll continue working on it...I'm thinking of making it one of those "message" songs, like "even though I'm gone, my memory lives on", or something like that.

I was also thinking of titling it "The Guitar" and making it a song about a guitar that I pass down.
 
mjr said:
I was also thinking of titling it "The Guitar" and making it a song about a guitar that I pass down.
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Excellent idea! Run with it......
 
ido1957 said:
Excellent idea! Run with it......
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Cool! Different ideas are starting to form in my head right now...I'll have to put them down on paper...I'll post once that's done, too...
 
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