Looking for some constructive criticism

[Marsaye]

Hi, I am new to mixing and producing tracks as well as a relatively new rapper. I would like some constructive criticism so I can make over all better music. You can listen to my music here http://members.soundclick.com/marsaye.

Thanks
-Jeremy

 

[jlewis]

you should put some more thought into your raps and work on your delivery. Maybe learn your raps better before you record, it sounds like you sometimes are uncertain of what you're saying, this is a problem with some of the rappers I work with, they get so eager to make a track they don't take the time to get comfortable with their rhymes before they record. If you are going to be rapping with that style, your timing and delivery better be phenomenal.

Since your flow/delivery could use some work, I would suggest you try to actually say something meaningful in your raps so if you don't quite pull off the flow, at least the listener might still be interested in what you have to say. As it is, you lose interest as soon as the listener gets to a point where your delivery isn't perfect.

I'm listening on laptop speakers so I can't say much about the mixing, but it did seem like the vocals didn't really sit well in the mix. Maybe try some compression on the vocal track and/or the master track as a starting point.

keep it up

 

[gullyjewelz]

i listened to stop drop.
cool beat. really catchy feel.
the hook was good too. but it seemed like there was alittle feedback registering in the recording. i would re do that,turning down the mic a little.
there was a long "space" after the first hook - is that SUPPOSED to be there? is a verse missing?
at the end of the first verse - the autotune feel is ok, but the last 2 words, where your voice goes into a dif. octave . .. I WOULDNT KEEP THAT if i were u.
all around - i like the song. i could see people jammin to it if u were performing it live - and in that case - you wouldnt need to make ANY changes - except that shift in octaves at the end of the 1st verse (and obviuosly, u need another verse or a longer hook or something)
feel free to check out the music i got posted and feedback too