looking for feedback

[rol123]

A 'downtempo' song.

I am not the singer, but it is my composition (I played all instruments except drums, recorded and mixed the music)



Let me know what you think.

View attachment MONICA@ SUNSET MASTERED.mp3


thanks and Happy holidays,
Roland

 

[TripleM]

The trashy drums sounded kind of cool. A bit mechanical, but the sound was cool.

The keyboard tone was a little cheap sounding.

It took a long time for the song to kick into gear.

The vocal was quite harsh. Too much energy in the mid 2Khz. It's getting covered up by the instruments and backing vocals. It's much dryer than the rest of the tracks. Kind of sounds like a cheap-ish USB mic.

The guitar and some of the keyboard sounds are a bit on the harsh sounding side.

 

[mjbphotos]

The kick and snare don't work well together in my ears - kick sounds like a cardboard box and the snare like a trash can lid. The lead vocal doesn't sit well into the mix, it definitely sounds like its done on top of the instruments - some EQ, compression and throwing a reverb on everything to bring it together might help.