Life from a side-view

[Halion]

Hey guys,

I'd like some comments on this song I wrote and recorded. You can find it here:
http://www.clownfleur.nl/song
Here are the things I already know:
- Vocals on the first part are poop, both in terms of what is beeing sung, and how it is beeing sung.
- Vocals are a bit out of tune near the end (and alot at the beginning, I know).
- Timing errors in all the stringed instruments (the drums are samples so they are timed 100% correct).

What do you think about the creative aspect, the mixing quality etc?

 

[xfinsterx]

Id say this is my favorite song ive heard since ive been here in these forums.


Good movements.
The song has a point.
Not in terms of lyrics.
In terms of how the parts work in conjunction, and ascend the song.
Bless you for having a sence of direction and taste.


As for the recording...
Bass is too up front in the verse IMO.
And you named everything else allready.
Good imaging in terms of the stereo field.


Ahem...ok,
Here we go.
Is that a young man, or a girl singing? or a pitch shifter?---Which one?
I assume its a girl, but it could be any three of those really.
Very strange voice. But (he/she?) had good taste in note choices and phrasing so i cant really complain.

 

[Halion]

Thanks mate

About the bass thing: your totally right, I did that on purpose. I'm a bassplayer, and I like the bass to be a bit more up-front. It's a taste thing, but if I were to, for instance, make an album, I'd tame the bass a bit.

The voice is a girl. I really like her voice, but she has very little control over it (bends up and down alot, and thinks she has a small vocal range, while she can actually do pretty high and pretty low). The vocals were done in 2 hours (that is, recording, editing and mixing), on a hot day and under pressure, so yeah, didn't expect that to come out so greatly either. However, I know where it needs improving so now it's just a matter of work. By the way, the girl is 18 years old.

At the end, that's a pitch-shift thing, because she didn't realize that keeping the same note for multiple bars was gonna conflict at the second and third bar. So just let her sings the note for a couple of bars (friction like you wouldn't belief) and then pitched.

 

[ragata]

A very good song indeed! The chorus reminded me of some old neo-folk favs

A agree about the bass, and I also thought that the strummed guitars are a bit too up front in the "outro". The vocals sound good, sonically.
I like the sound of those drums too!

Great work man, and thanks for sharing

 

[xfinsterx]

Btw.
One of the things i liked most about the end was the way the vocals did the hard pitch change.
That really grabbed me.
Im sorta glad she didnt want to change the note.