In Your Arms

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This is an idea I had for a mid-tempo love song. It is intended as a duet. I have completed the music and lyrics, and I have the backing track recorded. I am working with a pretty good female vocalist to record the vocals as a duet. I will sing the first verse and the bridge. She will sing the second verse, and we will sing together in the pre-choruses and the chorus.

Here are the lyrics...

In Your Arms
Words and music by Joseph Spain
Created with Jamstudio.com 2.7, Acoustica Mixcraft 4.5, and Audacity 1.7
Produced by Joseph Spain
CD: First Love
Demo recording
Copyright: Joseph Spain 2010

V1
A faceless world continues living
They have the heavens, sun, and sand
You whisper on the breeze
Your love's for me
My every wish is your command

Pre-chorus 1
And we both know where we are
You know I live for you
All our days will be just you and me
Our hearts go hand-in-hand

Chorus
Where the gods sigh in response
The angels sing your every praise
And I kneel before your majesty
Where I worship everyday
And we both know where we are
Where the rapids meet the calm
In a love we both have lived for
I could die in your arms

V2
A hopeless world continues needing
Everything you've given me
Your love is on the wind
It's Heaven sent
You're the reason that I breathe

Pre-chorus 2
And we both know who we are
One heartbeat comes from two
All our nights will be just you and me
Our love goes hand-in-hand

(repeat chorus)

Bridge
Heaven's hell would strike me down
If I ever lose your faith
You're the reason that I'm living
You're the only one I praise

(repeat chorus through fade)
 
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Whoa! Seems to be good! Some deep lyrics ^^ (I think, actually I am a beginer and I have never written a song before)

When do you think you will Finnish?
I'd like to hear this! No rush! ^•^
我的哥不绘比你好！ 真的！ I got lost and forgot how to say some of that in English. ... Weird translator...
 
Thanks for the kind words, Paralife.

When you write your first song, post it here for us to see.

If you need help or encouragement along the way, the group is generally a good resource for ideas, support, and constructive criticism.

Cheers,
Joseph
 
hey ice...

hey ice....

just reading it, its smooth... I like it...

2 thumbs up...
 
You are a hopeless romantic!!

Yep, the lyrics scan well, and are perfectly suited to a soppy romantic duet. It should scrub up well.

Now:

"Our hearts go hand in hand" . . . I got a mental picture of two cartoon hearts strolling hand in hand down the road. I'm not sure that's the sort of levity you wanted to convey.

Maybe you could combine bits from the prechorusses, and just repeat it, instead of having different.

For example:

And we both know where we are
You know I live for you
All our days will be just you and me
One heartbeat comes from two
 
Thanks for the kind words and good advice, Mike. :)

You're right. Soppy romantic songs consist of high fructose corn syrup poured over cartoon characters. :)

BTW, any recent songs from you or any new material featuring your niece with the lovely voice? (I think it was your niece... forgive me if I have the relationship wrong.)
 
Icy,
looks to be anothergood one from you. I look forward to hearing it.
I know I'm a pedant but will point out that a relationship that has one kneeling & worshipping the other rarely goes hand in hand.
Maybe: Together heart in hand?
It matters not a jot really - declarations of love don't often apply the laws of syntax or logic for that matter.
It reads as intended: declarations of a mutual love with both worshipping the other amidst a swirl of fantasy - & most of us have been in the place if not with the same words.
Please post your backing track - I like to listen as I read.
 
rayc said:
Icy,
looks to be anothergood one from you. I look forward to hearing it.
I know I'm a pedant but will point out that a relationship that has one kneeling & worshipping the other rarely goes hand in hand.
Maybe: Together heart in hand?
It matters not a jot really - declarations of love don't often apply the laws of syntax or logic for that matter.
It reads as intended: declarations of a mutual love with both worshipping the other amidst a swirl of fantasy - & most of us have been in the place if not with the same words.
Please post your backing track - I like to listen as I read.
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Thanks for the kind words and good advice, Ray.

I really like your suggestion to change 'hand-in-hand' to 'heart in hand' to fit the symbology of the message. I've reworked that line to include the change.

In fact, I liked your suggestion so much that I am strongly tempted to change the title to "In Your Arms (Heart in Hand)", becase that phrase is so central to the song's intent. Great idea! Would you like a writing credit? I'll be happy to add you.

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In Your Arms (Heart in Hand)
Words and music by Joseph Spain
Created with Jamstudio.com 2.7, Acoustica Mixcraft 4.5, and Audacity 1.7
Produced by Joseph Spain
CD: First Love
Demo recording
Copyright: Joseph Spain 2010

V1
A faceless world continues living
They have the heavens, sun, and sand
You whisper on the breeze
Your love's for me
Every wish is your command

Pre-chorus 1
And we both know where we are
You know I live for you
All our days will be just you and me
I'll follow heart in hand

Chorus
Where the gods sigh in response
The angels sing your name in praise
And I kneel before your majesty
Where I worship everyday
And we both know where we are
Where the rapids meet the calm
In a love we both have lived for
I could die in your arms

V2
A hopeless world continues needing
Everything you've given me
Your love is on the wind
It's Heaven sent
You're the reason that I breathe

Pre-chorus 2
And we both know who we are
One heartbeat comes from two
All our nights will be just you and me
Our love dreams heart in hand

(repeat chorus)

Bridge
Heaven's hell would strike me down
If I ever lose your faith
You're the reason that I'm living
You're the only one I praise

(repeat chorus through fade)

Cheers,
Joseph
 
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Good stuff, Mike! As you know, I really enjoy the new age genre. Something like this could be considered new age material.

Please keep us posted on what you're doing. I always enjoy listening to your work, whatever form it takes.

Cheers,
Joseph
 
icystorm said:
Good stuff, Mike! As you know, I really enjoy the new age genre. Something like this could be considered new age material.

Please keep us posted on what you're doing. I always enjoy listening to your work, whatever form it takes.

Cheers,
Joseph
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Great work from you, Joseph! Can't wait to hear the finished product.
And thanks for your piece as well, GZ, haven't seen you around for awhile.

-Mike
 
Strat1958 said:
Great work from you, Joseph! Can't wait to hear the finished product.
And thanks for your piece as well, GZ, haven't seen you around for awhile.

-Mike
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Thanks, Mike.

Any new material from you on the horizon, my friend?

Cheers,
Joseph
 
Armistice said:
What was the question?
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Ah, yes -- the question! The infernal, perplexing question!

If memory serves, the question went something like this...

You are on a journey and you meet two guardians at the crossroad of life who are guarding two doors. One door leads to misery and death and the other leads to happiness and life.

One of the guardians always lies and the other always tells the truth.

You may pose only one question to only one of the guardians.

What question would you ask to learn the true identity of the door that leads to happiness and life?

That was the question!

Cheers,
Joseph
 
Joseph,
It's all yours mate. Your ideas sparked an half baked idea that you caught & modelled into something useful. A bit like recycling from the pile left on the curb during council clean up week.
 
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