I'm Alive [Nu Metal/Hard Rock] Please critique?

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So, I got my new shockmount and in the process of setting it up, I got inspiration to write and record this song. It took about 12 hours to do what I've done so far. Please have a listen and give a critique if you have an opinion of the song. Thank you.

 
As far as the mix goes, I think the kick is too quiet and the snare is too loud.

The synth that's in the chorus is a bit shrill. After a minute it becomes a little much. For me there's just a lot of high end

I like where this is going though, not a bad song.
 
- Cool riffs and massive guitars. I like the sound of the guitars.
- I think the song spends a little too much time before the vocals enter the first time.
- The drums sound like they are placed far away, way to distant sounding.
- There something going on with the verse vocals that I can't quite make out, but it is a bit tiresome to listen to. The singer has a cool voice but there's some effect or backing vocals that messes it up a bit I think.
- The synth is too loud, especially in the chorus part.

Cool song by the way
 
Cool song. The intro is too long. The synth is harsh. Tweek the drums. There's something going on under the vocal line that is detracting from the vocals, makes it all sound out of tune or something. I like the singers voice, the lyrics are good. I'd also experiment with vocal lines, they are sounding a bit drone-ish, try to liven them up, add dynamics.

I know that's a lot of criticism, but it's just a personal preference.

But you do have a very good song going here.
 
Hey, thanks for the replies! I went through and tweaked stuff a bit and I think it's sounding better. The vocal thing is just me being off key. But, I was able to make improvements on the points you were hitting on. Here's the new mix:

 
Like it. Wish the drums didn't get so lost when the vocals are full throttle.
 
Sounds pretty spot on for the genre.
Personally I think the synth tone is a bit limp and out of place.
The drums seem to be almost mono for the most part except for a few cymbal splashes.
 
I have remixed yet again and I extended the song. I've pretty much did a complete restructure. I added a new part as well. I like how it sounds now. Things seem to fit together better. What do you think?



Thank you so much for your input. It's pretty awesome to see how far I've come from when I first started on the bbs. You guys have been so helpful. Thank you. *wipes away tear*
 
I jumped straight to the extended mix (original mix link isn't working, btw).

The big critique that sticks out to me is that the chorus vox seem to have some harsh auto-tuney artifacts on them. It's especially prevalent on the transitions at the beginnings and ends of words ("I h-h-had to do this... s-s-so you can see... I w-w-will grow stronger") It sounds like you're sliding up a digital keyboard.

Otherwise. Guitar and drum tones sound big and beefy yet clear. Synth pads sound good

Ha ha! It transitioned straight to a WhiteStrat song after yours ended!
 
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