I like my own damn song

[LI Slim]

..........so tell me what you think. The song is "I Hate You Spring" at http://www.mp3.com/LarryKolker. The lyrics are:


I hate you Spring, you make my heart sing
You make me sense every little thing
All of this skin, it draws one in,
I can't maintain equilibrium

Stop bein' the coolest time of year
Don't offer me the blunts and the beer
Stop sayin' I should stop and smell the rose
Stop wavin' it under my nose, I've smelled enough of those
I hate you Spring.

I hate you Spring, you make my eyes sting
I want out but I'm wearing your ring
Don't kid me Spring, you're just a tease
You hold out such possibilities

For four long years I've kept you at bay
But you keep insistin' that I come out and play
You keep me out till half past two
It's all my fault but I'm blaming you, once more and we're through
I hate you Spring...


Kiss my ass Spring you know what I mean
The day's too long and there's all this green,
You shake your head and feign a smile
But you'll be passing after awhile

Stop bein' the coolest time of year
Don't offer me the blunts and the beer
Don't be handing me all that jive
Don't make me feel so goddamn alive, how could I survive?
I hate you Spring...


copyright Larry Kolker 2001




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[Aaron Cheney]

Hey LI,

Well, even though Spring is universally thought of as good, the lyrics do work pretty well in your song. Do allergies and hay fever run in your family or something? A clean recording too.
And by the way, I think you have the coolest picture of anyone on the BBS. Is that you?
Aaron
http://www.aaroncheney.com

 

[LI Slim]

Thanks, Aaron.

Yes, it's me. In keeping with the homegrown theme, I took the picture myself with my own little digital camera and added the cool effect using the software that came with the camera.

 

[Chris Shaeffer]

Nifty song. It all works fine. I like the opposite view of spring to highlight how you feel about yourself.

If I were to get nit-picky, there is one line that seems a little weaker than the rest:

"I want out but I'm wearing your ring"

It works fine, it just seems a little...cheaper than the rest of the song. See what I mean? Nit-picking.

Just my .02

Take care,
Chris

 

[LI Slim]

Good point, Chris; that line's a bit forced. Thanks for the comments.

 

[elbenj]

LI,

You are funny, I have liked all your stuff. Very entertaining!
I think maybe you could add some overdub backing vocals on the chorus singing in unison. This will give it the feel that a lot more
people feel the same way (Im raising my hand)

By the way, how do we get our mp3,s on mp3.com these days.
I started to enroll and found myself getting ready to get the
premium service. They seem to have made it not as easy to get
the free service

Keep up the good work!