I Can't Give Up

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1) The Mix (obviously - Vox too hot? Any audio "stingers"?)
2) The Arrangement (is that synth over the top?)
3) The Song

Wrote it a few years ago and only just recently tried to put it down on tape.

Thanks ....

"I Can't Give Up" http://www.nowhereradio.com/bpoco/singles

BPOCO
 
Quite a voice you got there.
I almost turned off when I heard the water runnin at the start.
This song is too good for sound effects IMO.
The synth is pretty strange.
Could be replaced with tasteful electric guitar.
Good song & great vocal performance.
 
HevyD47Ca said:
Could be replaced with tasteful electric guitar.
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OMG - How strange - look at what that avatar is holding :D

I do agree though. Nice song!

Q.
 
Qwerty and HevyD47Ca

Thanks for listening. The "synth" is actually two instruments ... part synth and part electric slide guitar. The electric slide uses some 'goofy' compression to eliminate the initial attack of picking the string. I originally heard strings in this part - but the strings on my synth sounded to ... well, er ... too synthy. So I said "screw it", I'll just go FULL electronic.

I personally thought it set the right mood for the song - my wife loved it. However, my band buddies said it was overproduced and out of place. So rather than f**ing with it, I decided to post it here ... the REAL acid test !!

BPOCO
 
OK,

Opening is cool. The Piano, Vocal and guitar are great. Lose the synth strings stuff. This is a good song and doesn't need the clutter.

Nice piece, the strings are distracting.
 
Got to say, I got suckered into this tune, I liked it. The synth is actually not bad, a little too slide intensive but was expecting worse.

Nice voice as well.
 
I agree with others that the tune is strong enough to stand on it's own without the extras. I would shorten the intro too.

Mix of the piano and guitar is nice.
 
DrummChris and sloop

Thanks for taking the time. Appreciate the feedback.

lynx

Thanks as well. I don't suppose you'd like to expand on what "... got suckered in" means?


In anycase, the general consensus is in favor of dumping the synth. I honestly feel the bg needs some type of fill. I'll go back to the drawing board and see if I can find something that sounds better.

BPOCO
 
Great song BPOCO, really beautiful.

The song and melody are very good-good singing too.

Good production ideas-adding elements as it went, I liked the spacey slide sounds. Is there any guitars in this?? I need to go back and read I guess..Drums coming in for the chorus--good touch.

Nice recording-all sounds are distinct and you seem to cover the spectrum pretty well--voice sounds very good. The fade may have been a bit sloppy...

Very easy to listen to-been listening for 1/2 an hour and its not getting on my nerves.
 
Hi there,

Had more time to listen properly.

I like this a lot. You have a nice voice to listen too.

- I didn't mind the rain, but I was expecting hair-band, heavy metal ;)
- Nice full sound across everything
- I would like to hear your right hand quickly arpeggiate through the chord every now and then instead on the straight bloomp on the beat all the time. Keep it straight and then through it in during the last eight b4 the guitar enters?
- I too really like the slidey things. Whalesong. Really did it for me mood wise.
- "...mist-A-A-ken" around 1:10 I think - shouldn't have a triplet in the melody over the A. Small gripe. Same for "co-o-ost" @ 2:04.
- Didn't really like the sound effects returning in the middle. Just preference.
- I like your guitar tone. Nice and tight.

Post more!

Q.
 
Loved the tone and ambience in the piano, a little hot, sounds like its sitting beside the voice instead of accompanying. The voice is very good with the room behind it. Guitar steady. A bit too electronic sounding on the synth fills. The rain was cool, just sounds like its raining in the room all over where you sitting at the piano, maybe a bit strong.
 
Stratomaster

Thanks for the kudos. Yeah - there is guitar. It's riding on top of the synth part. See one of my earlier responses - basically the guitar was electric slide with some effects and "funky" compression.

Glad to hear it didn't get annoying. That's #7 on my list of 10 things I want in a song. LOL.

Qwerty

I really appreciate the re-listen and the detailed post. It's that type of analysis I enjoy and could only get on this board.

1) Whalesong. I wasn't going for that sound. I stumbled across it and really liked it. I've always thought a whale sounded sad. Perfect for the mood of this song.

2) Guitar tone. I was very happy with the sound I got on the acoustic - HELL, I shocked myself. Given what I've been able to do in the past, this was a huge improvement. Many thanks to Chris Harris for an EQ-ing tip on acoustics.

3) Sound Effects in Middle. I've gotten several comments (not on this board) that concur with you. Most have suggested that I move the rain to the end - to sort of bookend the song.

4) Mistaken/Cost. I can't say I agree with you on the phrasing comment. The phrasing mirrors the piano part that plays during the intro and fade out.

5) Guitar Appregiate. Hmmmmm? Never occurred to me. I think I was so distracted with getting the guitar sounding good that I was afraid to complicate it.

Thanks again for your response.

Toki987

I struggled with how loud I wanted the piano. When I dropped it down, the vocal was overpowering. I tend to like everthing out front anyway, so I brought it back up. I'm out of control with compression. Just a personal preference.

I'm glad it sounds like the rain is falling all over the piano. I think that's a cool visual that adds to the song's lament.

BPOCO
 
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