HR Challenge : One Goodbye

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This one can go for the one hour challenge and the dry/no mixing challenge, and if there was a suck challenge, it would lead that pack:D DIdnt finish the lyrics so I filled in a few places with junk, but whats new....

ONE GOODBYE

Sitting here alone
Just this empty house
And one more beer I know
The memories will never fill
The space within my heart
Where you used to live
And now the time has come
For reality , the truth that I must face
The love I always counted on
Has gone away
And now all thats left for me
To count are days

Cause 5 days ago you left me
Without giving me a clue
And now these 4 walls are
Closing in on me
And those 3 words "I love you"
Will never mean the same to me
Now that the 2 of us
Are thru its plain to see
My whole world will never be the same
And its funny how everything can change
With 1 Goodbye

Sitting here alone
Just me and my tears
And no more beer I know
That youre not coming back
But still I hope I will in time
Learn to let you go
And learn to just move on
But just for now
Ill sit in misery
Our love has died
It wont come back
Its gone away
And now all thats left to do
Is count the days

(repeat chorus)

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Other than the super-crispy cymbals, and the in-the-next-room vocal sound the mix is pretty balanced.

You didn't cheat, and use a limiter did you?:D

Song is kinda cheesey, but any song that has beer in it is cool with me. Bummer that you ran out though. I'd be depressed about that too.

At least you can buy more beer. Hell, you can buy a new girl too if you go to right place.:eek:

:D
 
good tune...low vocal volume, and what appears to be a lot of compression on the gtrs....and/or the mix...but that would be cheatin'...eh? no!!... sounded good for a ruffie.
 
Lot's of ambience here, really nice sounding song but the vocals need to come up (and if I'm saying that they probably need to come way up). I wasn't expecting a full band, I think the only stuff of yours I've heard before has been one singer, one guitar.

This is a very charming song. The guitars sounded great.
 
Gidge--this is a cool song, and that chorus is fucking brilliant writing. I dug the sound of the tracks--is that all dry? How did you get that gorgeous guitar sound?

OK. I'm not nuts about your vocal, but I see strengths in your writing and your tracking. Damn, dude. You're good. And, that chorus lyric and melody is hit song stuff, I think. You sold me.
 
Hi Gidge,

I liked that twangy guitar sound you got. Very cool and it made me feel a shade more country. The vox were a bit distant but I like the lyrics, i would've prefered a bit more "southerness" on them if that makes sense.
 
Not bad Gidge. I swear I hear compression on the clean electric and deffinately on the drums (they sound pretty good except for the cymbals).
 
hey guys thanks for listening.....

I may have misinterpreted the rules...the guitars arent dry, they were recorded with J-Station patches that included compression and mild chorus only and Eq'ed extra bright.....at mix stage nothing was done.....for the bass i used a J-Station Ampeg SVT model ... the electric guitar was the Blackface model ('65 Twin Reverb) with mild chorus recorded stereo, panned hard left and right......the acoustic was recorded direct using the J-Stations "Direct" mode with mild chorus......everything was done during tracking as per the rules that i may have stretched?......

the vocal was my sorry ass attempt at getting reverb any way possible because my voice really sucks......it was a sm57 and a ecm8000 each going thru a Joe Meek VC3Q with no compression/EQ.....i tried my v67G but without compression the level was all over the place so my only choice was to swallow the sm57, sung facing an open closet with the ecm8000 hanging in it......i think i did use a bit too much of that "reverb" track......

the drums are samples with Fruity Loops completely dry, no compression.......it seems my crispy, cut thru the mix cymbal choices werent too good:D

for mixing, the tracks were panned and low cut filers were used on the guitars....other than that nothing else was used.......

M.Bane-no limiter, and yes, i am the king of fromage.....

mixmkr - again, i thought effects/compression was ok for the tracking aspect.....

Doug - thanks, but my naked voice is the LAST thing i want loud in a mix.....:)

crawdad - you have no idea how much that writing compliment means coming from you.....i guess if i get to work on the verses I can head for Nashville:D .....gorgeous guitars are my lovely $149 Yamaha Pacifica and my $50 garage sale Takamine EG240 thru a J-Station.....

Khompewtur, Ive been trying to get my lil demos to sound more country....I agree about trying to get the vocal more "southern" but I still havent tapped into how to use my voice yet and get the sound i want, mostly because Im so uncomfortable in front of a mic...shoulda had a few beers first.....

Track Rat - thanks for listening...yeah there was compression on the guitar patch but drums were just straight samples.....
 
guitars sound GREAT ,,,,, i can almost hear the vocals...lol...drums sound good too....maybe a bit crispy....and a touch wet too ...
this is dry?!?!?...YOU LIAR LOL....ok im just bitter about my sound..i agree about the chorus ..LOVE THAT PART......and the part where i can hear you rubbing the oil over your chest ....OH i mean ...the solo .....
:D



jamal
 
ok, first off I want to congratulate you for the bass playing in that tune, I dont think it could be more perfect for the tune and was plyed "right". The drums were good too. I liked the sound of the kick and the snare with the bass. Nice rimshots, there was a one or two kicks that were sorta by themselves with nothing around them. Guitar playing was smooth and the tone was fine. very nice writing with a clean and pretty flow to it. I couldnt hear the vocal that well but I read the words. It could be produced as well as anything thats out there in that genre....
 
Excellent use of the room! Good job Gidge. Everything sounded fine especially that bass!
 
Nice song. I liked it. I really liked the lead guitar - both the part and the tone. Really nice. Vocally it sounded a little out of your range. Harmonies would be nice. But I can understand that if you're living up to two challenges in one song, somthing has to give.

Small pitch issues at 1:08 and 1:43. A couple of other spots. A little buzz on the right side at 2:01. Was there a string or two on the lead guit that's out of tune?

Pretty tune.
 
"so my only choice was to swallow the sm57, sung facing an open closet with the ecm8000 hanging in it......"


That is the most original vocal recording technique I have ever heard of, and should be the basis of it's own challenge.....:D
Job well done on the rest of the song Gidge, but I'd rather hear you singing into a mic in a normal manner. This just came out too muffled.


Twist
 
Gidge-mo.. great song writing. Can't comment too much on sonics because I'm on shit pc speakers at work. But I loved the guitar. Great playing, arranging, and tone. The vocals sounded a bit out of place. Almost like another room or something. Great lyrics.
 
Sounds really good Mike!

Nice effect with the two vocal tracks,it worked very well.
I'm going to have to try that,I definitly can't post any vocals dry.
It would be too inhumane!:D

Great sounding mix for no mastering!
Nice writing too!

Pete
 
Jamal - the drum samples are as-is, which may or may not be pre-verbed, but the rules do allow that....thanks for the chorus compliment....i think i have a line on someone to help me shape the verses up, so this will probably be a total re-write, which is the very reason i spend very little time on demos (about an hour or so on this one)

Toki - the bass compliment means alot coming from you, mr. Bass-master:) Feel fortunate you couldnt hear the vocal:D

scott - i think the room idea was a good one in theory, but i used a bit too much of the room track......

MMM - i rarely do harmonies and if i do, it needs tons of compression,reverb, and EQ, so......yes, pitch issues there as usual and i am having issues with my G-string:D i think a lead pencil is in my future to help there though.....im still a vocal newbie struggling to find my voice and my range....thanks for the ears:)

twist - i guess i am gonna re-think that vocal technique....maybe ill retrack it in the shower......

JR - thanks dude...no the vocals werent in another room, just in the closet.....i will be retracking the vocal and coming out of the closet, though:eek: thanks for the compliment on the lyrics.....

pete - thanks for listening dude....hopefully my voice sucks enuff that you can feel better about yours (which i like, btw).....and hey, i promise ill work on that song before 2003 is over with:eek: :p ;) :D :rolleyes:
 
i pulled the closet reverb track off and posted it......so unforunately the vocal is now in your face.....i sincerely apologize.......:D
 
The vocals are still a bit back, but definitely sound better than when they were in the closet. Out is good. colors of unity my brother. I love your countdown in the chorus. Very clever.
 
JR#97 said:
I love your countdown in the chorus. Very clever.
Click to expand...

Well, I was shooting for "wildcard" but Ill settle for "very clever"...... :D
 
Mike,

This song is well written. Great guitar sound. Bass is very solid. Fruity loops!?! Nice job!!

Your vocal passion, tone and quality are fine, but your intonation is all over the place.

I DO NOT WANT TO GET FLAMED FOR MY NEXT STATEMENT BY ANYONE!!!!As a production tool for aspiring songwriters trying to pitch their songs, incorporate the Antares.
It is a tool that increases a prospective deal by 1000%, and intonation will inhibit the songs chances. I'm just against the thing being used in professional production by artists trying to pull the wool over the eyes of the public.

Gidge, unless you are a purist, I'd consider it. No offense meant here at all. You are a fine musician and writer!

Ralph
 
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