Howdy do. Critique my song?

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BurnBarfield

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Hello, I have posted this before, but have changed a few things and would like you to lend me your ears. I posted this at the other place and still got no help on it. Hopefully someone will be kind. Song or recording comments would be appreciated, or even both. Someone on this board actually did the drums for me. I did the guitars and bass, but I just have no singing skills so that is what is missing, vocals. Well, it would also help if you told me how I was doing for being 15, and recording since January of this year. But enough rambling here is a link.
http://www.soundclick.com/util/streamM3U.m3u?ID=1222509&q=Hi
Thanks for your help, and everything.

-Aaron
 
On the song Moo:

I like the tone of the opening guitar, but the high hat comes in at a much slower tempo than the song is running. So you have some timing issues there... can't really tell what the bass is doing..

You also have some clipping issues when the drums come in around :17

Keep it up, you'll only improve.
 
I agree with 79_Les_Paul as far as the High Hat goes. I would fix that, it kind of ruins the intro. I also agree that the guitar tone is nice. Aside from the things that 79 has pointed out, I would also like to suggest working on the passage that starts at about :50. The notes are way of key. I like the direction that you are going with it, and the squeal and art. harmonics are nice, but I would rewrite that whole passage. Just my opinion though.
 
very serious timing problems. mix is a little muddy but overall the tone ain't bad. keep working.
 
Hey, BurnBarfield.

Not bad at all for 15. Much better than I was. I think you have a good start on a good song. As mentioned above, you need to get the timing worked out. Keep it up!
 
YEah good atempt. I couldnt hear the drums atall, just a slight bit of hihats! The guitar was meaty and up front which is good, but it seemed a bit muddy and didnt have that tonal crispness that is needed. Did you use an amp? what amp, what mic? did you use compression, you should use a bit. and maybe try putting it through an oral exciter (vocal enhancer) to see the outcome. but take a while to tweak the knobs to just the right settings. Try geting the sound you think is right, then record it. Have a break for 10 mins and go back and tweak the setings again and record. take a break. repeat for a few more times. Then compare the takes. This way you will have fresh ears for listening to lots of different takes and you will find the best sound for you in an instant. Really give it a try it is worth it.
 
sounds like u turned up the high frequency up alot on the drums or the cymbals were mixed abit loud in the drum mix pllus there out of time
the guitars have great tone good job doubling
at 3:00 mark i love the harmony
and the overall mix sound like u put some compression on it mabe a bit too much cuz it sound like the amount of compression radios use
peace
 
Greeneye said:
I would also like to suggest working on the passage that starts at about :50. The notes are way of key. I like the direction that you are going with it, and the squeal and art. harmonics are nice, but I would rewrite that whole passage. Just my opinion though.
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agreed.

overall decnt sound...i wish i had been recording material like this when i was 15...:::shudders at the thought of his old music...and then realizes he hasn't got any better:::
 
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